Departure Poem by JENIE FRANKSAY

Departure



your heart and you,
made of stone.
went away
leaving me alone.

not even said 'goodbye',
not even once.
you wanted to go away
far from my glance.

there is a void,
there is my voice,
which asks you,
'why you made this choice? '

your train has arrived,
and will depart soon,
i will be left behind
tearful and loon...

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COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Shania K. Younce 05 October 2013

I thought the poem to be well put. I like your style. I wish I knew better formations of poetry my-self. Well done.

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~ Jenie~ 24 June 2013

you talent is hats off nice poem young poet

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Vishal Sharma 24 June 2013

nicely done i like one thing in your poem the endings... they are simply awesome, amusing, suprising, nostalgic, and sometimes terryfying, ! ! keep penning sister...

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