Dislocation Poem by ONElia AVElar

Dislocation

Rating: 3.1


I sent you a kiss
via air, alas
The wind was not
In your direction!
It blew it far away
from here
another cheek became
a promised landing pier
Oh dear, we tend to
overestimate the
conductivity of the air.

Sofia,02. June 2008

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
David Desantis 06 June 2008

hahahahah or wind currents for that matter ;) .....awesome and original

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Ivan Donn Carswell 07 June 2008

You suggest it didn't land in dis location - but did in dat! Nice tight construction with clever rhyme. Rgds, Ivan

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Dr.subhendu Kar 08 June 2008

imprint might be dappled kiss might be scalar or vector, , , , , , , , , , , , , wonderful imagery by the love, well penned, thanks

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Flora Gillingham 09 June 2008

Brilliant! Saved as a fave. Fx

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Vidyadhar Durgekar 09 June 2008

Lucky was that cheek...............beautiful poem with the flying kiss

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Indira Babbellapati 26 August 2009

it's so much in the fitness of things...doesn't everything begin with a particular objective and end up as something else...we're all wind-prone!

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Original Unknown Girl 05 May 2009

How wonderful to imagine a kiss sent along the air and landing on some unsuspecting person's cheek! ! ! Bet they were thrilled... Lovely poem Onelia. HG: -) xx

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C. P. Sharma 02 December 2008

Awonderful mix up of humour and sarcam. Loved it. O dear, you sent a flying kiss, Such kisses many a time miss. LOL! ! ! ! !

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Pacific Hernandez 30 September 2008

Nice poem, a kiss went astray and landed on another cheek. 10 for this.

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Ashraful Musaddeq 11 September 2008

Wow! How nice is form of the poem; how beautiful is the content of the poem! Really nice job done so far sending a kiss! Enjoyed.

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