All my senses sank into the black water
and clasped onto a world unknown.
The Reality got merged with the illusion
and frightened the ant I flew on....
the reality and the illusion...good symbolic write...the black water and the ant are the symbols you use well there...thanks...10
i have never been drunk, but i get what you said.. from stories told to me.. it is the same.
fantastic, as always, my friend! loved the poem. thank you.
Now you must have been pretty drunk to fly on an ant! ! Great imagination and a twist at the finish. Well done. Karin
Heh! ! Carl can be very harsh at times... But I feel this is a very imaginative piece Vaibav.. True it is kinda short, but very nice imagery... A different poem. cheers Shan
Well, this poem was disappointing, Vaibhav, for after the fine three lines, the fourth and concluding line was disappointing and I felt there should have been more to this brief poem. A poet of your impressive ability should have been able to carry the ideas you expressed a bit further and to a more satisfying conclusion. Carl.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
'and frightened the ant i flew on'...just in four lines you come out with lovely imagery...reality getting merged with illusion..almost like a dream..senses are always drunk either with joy or despair..the black water here colors the poem...despair..lovely