Dee Daffodil


Dunes - Poem by Dee Daffodil

In a hollow
Etched out over time
We take shelter from the wind

This is our shelter
Safe haven!

Yet...
Even as I lie here beside you
I can feel sand
Peppering my skin
And I realize
That my skin is awake!

Life is good
Inside this hollow
Built for two
Life is good!

Grasses blow wildly
Wind whispers voices
Sands become dunes
In this hollow
Etched by time


((HW)/May 1,2007)


Comments about Dunes by Dee Daffodil

  • Rookie - 0 Points Chuck Audette (8/13/2008 10:38:00 AM)

    ahhh.. wonderful sensory piece. I can almost smell that sea air and feel the cool breeze!
    -chuck (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie Roger Cornish (3/8/2008 1:33:00 PM)

    Thie reminde me when we were kids...
    playing in dunes and making hideouts...
    Great work D...
    R. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Not a member No 4 (5/13/2007 6:26:00 AM)

    It's hard to find such a place of sanctuary in the modern world. The sense of escaping is very strong in this Dee, and it's a very appealing notion. Great idea very well expressed - stripped down to the essentials, both poem and theme! The best to you, jim xx (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Red Blooded Black Hearted (5/8/2007 11:11:00 PM)

    I love the safe haven idea. It was a great poem Dee: -) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Anna Russell (5/5/2007 10:42:00 AM)

    Gorgeous Dee - I love the idea of your skin being 'awake'.
    Hugs
    Anna xxx (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ted Sheridan (5/5/2007 10:11:00 AM)

    And it goes so well with a couple of Adult beverages....LOL (Report) Reply

  • Rookie David Taylor (5/3/2007 7:02:00 AM)

    Warm and cosy
    Very rosy
    I like your etchings
    Do like mine? (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Diane Violet (5/2/2007 12:32:00 PM)

    This is beautiful Dee.........love it!
    Hugs, Diane (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Barry Van Allen (5/2/2007 8:10:00 AM)

    Dee,
    Such a beautiful thought,
    a feeling, to hold each other close, perchance ...
    but, when that sand gets in your underpants,
    you can forget about romance!

    B.V.A. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Careful with that dogma, my karma might hit it . (5/2/2007 2:37:00 AM)

    Yeah, it's a very tactile poem isn't it? That feeling is unmistakeable. I'm imagining a fairly overcast but dry day for some reason. Am I close?
    Ez (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Archie Langford (5/2/2007 12:52:00 AM)

    brings back menories of younger days
    the dunes that hid us from the gaze
    of others on the beach.
    Love your poem it`s a peach. love archie (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 43,123 Points Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr (5/2/2007 12:34:00 AM)

    This is pageantly beautiful work, my dear...The imagery is radiant & full of verve...
    Can almost feel that last grain of sand in the heel of my beach sandal........lol!

    FjR (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, May 2, 2007

Poem Edited: Sunday, February 20, 2011


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