Shahzia Batool

Freshman - 745 Points (Pakistan)

Elections-2013 - Poem by Shahzia Batool

Tall claims and vain boasts-
a nation sits in paper-boats
of false vows and fake oaths

Shoutings, howlings of big names,
TV anchors all aflame,
Foul exchange of angry blames

little Pond and huge whales,
swallowing rights on large scales,
leaving us to groan and wail

Those we've never seen before,
beg for votes from door-to-door,
on their knees, nay, all fours

taking risks there is no room-
who is making fool of whom?
Let us see whose fate will bloom

This alone, our dire need:
Save us from all fraud and greed-
Bless us, God, with honest lead!


Poet's Notes about The Poem

Courtesy:
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Special thanks to Mr. Paul Fried - Lecturer at University of Wisconsin-River Falls, Greater Minneapolis-St. Paul Area, for his substantial guidance which refined this effort!
best regards,
shahzia...
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Paul Fried has sent you a message.
Date: 4/26/2013

Subject: RE: Elections in Pakistan poem!

I am most grateful that you invited me to read it- it is a wonderful poem and was a pleasure to read. If you find any of my suggestions useful, that is only a bonus to an already good experience of the poem.

I also like the fact that it's shaped a bit like a rhymed ghazal - but with three lines instead of couplets. Very nice.

Paul
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Carlostella Rosanna tutor at non specific
To: Shahzia Naqvi
Date: April 27,2013

Hi, Shahzia,
your poem is a sign of strong social engagement, which I appreciate.
What you write is (unfortunately) very true: every country needs institutions and politicians, but the first don't work as they should and the second are affected by power aims and corruption.
In Italy, we say: 'Tutto il mondo è paese', which means -approximately translated- 'All over the world we live in the same village'. This is also shown by your poem. (Sadly) great!

Regards,
Rosanna
Milan Area, Italy

Comments about Elections-2013 by Shahzia Batool

  • Rookie Sun Shine (5/8/2013 9:02:00 AM)

    2 days ahead, plx pray for imran khan: (

    the poem is awesome for realism. (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 2 Points Lasoaphia Quxazs (5/5/2013 11:43:00 AM)

    Just look at this side: Everything is a lesson in this life, and someone has to learn from them. We can pray to God to clear up the situation, but if He would, there would not be a lesson for many.
    Anyway, that happens what we are looking for. What we keep our mind on, that is what we see coming. That is why I do not read papers, do not look at the news on the TV, because I know they are so far from me, that that is their life. This is not an easy task, but this is the reason, that I live in harmony, peace and true happiness. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,742 Points Wahab Abdul (5/2/2013 11:00:00 AM)

    an apt commentary especially on the political situation of your country and generally for all.. i love socio-political poems...kudos to you.. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 103 Points Robert Green (5/1/2013 4:42:00 PM)

    So strong, so true, enough to make grown men cry. Its true of EVERY country sadly. Excellent write. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,763 Points S.zaynub Kamoonpuri (4/30/2013 8:53:00 AM)

    Aha a remarkable parody of the demagogues hee hee. Im truly impresd pal! Esp d last stanza was so nice. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 347 Points David Wood (4/27/2013 12:40:00 PM)

    Oh the dreaded elections, politicians, the best money can buy! A good poem. Thanks (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,253 Points Unwritten Soul (4/27/2013 12:12:00 AM)

    Choose someone that is better, for better future! I am not into politics but we have to vote, it is either we let it be dark or brighter...we are the determinants...to me chose someone who plans for better plan for all and less care about attacking other personal issues..that actually reflect what a good leader about, focus on the national aim not self_Soul (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 59 Points Hira Akhtar (4/26/2013 10:30:00 AM)

    yeah beautifully written (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,487 Points Valerie Dohren (4/24/2013 12:41:00 PM)

    We would all like an honest lead, but they are all benders of the truth. Great write Shahzia. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 10,066 Points Lyn Paul (4/24/2013 2:06:00 AM)

    Such a clever write Shahzia that fits all countries.Our opposition leader has a permanent hand up his back so he doesn't say the wrong thing.A ventriloquist. Thank you (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 39,733 Points Aftab Alam Khursheed (4/23/2013 10:00:00 PM)

    Truth and honesty of political world is in museum the core option of them is corruption, the people in democracy are the most corrupt if they support money, caste, religion, and the dynasty..., corruption for them to cope up the election budget.(aawaam pahale leeder baad me bikate hain) (jaisa praja waisaa raajaa) nice to read the poem thank u (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Passionate Reader (4/23/2013 3:34:00 PM)

    You have depicted a true picture of politics all over the world. I just loved the theme of the poem, the rhyming and the last stanza with the prayer and hope for a change!

    This only is our dire need
    Save us from all fraud and cheat
    Bless us God with honest lead! ! !

    It’s a lovely poem. Keep writing! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 543 Points Yasmeen Khan (4/23/2013 10:38:00 AM)

    Wonderfully done! you have given mouth to everyone's feelings here. Wish in the last triplet is the voice of all hearts.It's a realistic approach to the present situation...a great write Shazia
    I wish your poetry bloom more and more! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 558 Points Tribhawan Kaul (4/23/2013 8:10:00 AM)

    Timely representation of facts in verses. Applies both to India (2014) and Pakistan(2013) . Sentiments of a true citizen voiced here. Honest leader are found but few. Three line rhyming stanzas make it a poem to sing too. An exposing poem from your pen, Shahzia. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Frank James Davis (4/23/2013 3:20:00 AM)

    Poetry after my own heart. Sincere prayer demonstrates the conviction that a good God rules in the affairs of men.
    Great work, Shahzia! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 71 Points Indira Babbellapati (4/23/2013 1:47:00 AM)

    you have given vent to the existing political scenario all over the world. wonderful job, lady... we need more of this to sensitize peoples :) (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,174 Points Saadat Tahir (4/23/2013 12:47:00 AM)

    stupendous.....

    Those who're never seen before,
    begging for votes from door-to-door,
    on their knees, nay, all their fours,
    lovely.....

    prof you written a marvelous piece

    :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie R.k Das (4/23/2013 12:19:00 AM)

    nice message, , intervention of providence sought in right earnest, , amen.. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 22,181 Points Valsa George (4/22/2013 11:13:00 PM)

    A very ardent prayer, Shahzia! This is a cross piece of the world scenario! As the elections arrive, new faces appear in new guises, the 'avowed saviors of man and society'. Once throned on the seat of authority, they begin to show their real colors! ! Let us pray together, save us from all fraud and cheat! Greatly enjoyed this beautiful write! ! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, April 22, 2013

Poem Edited: Friday, September 27, 2013


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