Evolution Poem by Pamela Davison

Evolution

Rating: 4.0


Indignant wounds of disappointment
Fortify this world of walls,
But she is indomitable
And will not be destroyed
By contrived hopelessness.
No, she cannot be deterred.

Watch her tear at ominous barriers
In spite of admonition,
As though it were the only thing
She had to live for.
Indeed,
See this as her truth.

Intention is her objective,
Drumming her to victory
As she squeezes the pulp
From everything she believes in.
No one has ever happened upon
Such radiant passion.

This is her hour of greatness,
Recapitulated by the brutality
Of a cruel and typically
Unreasoning faction
Known as mankind,
Here, she is increased.

A faithless breed
Cannot suspend her declaration,
It is her single salvation.
Like any visionary
She’ll dominate maliciousness,
Unlimited in her evolution.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Max Reif 22 July 2005

I think your language is quite sophisticated and nuanced. I don't actually 'see' any concrete images. I think bringing the poem a little more down to earth, grounding it in an actual situation, would make it much more striking. See what other people say.

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