In my life I’ve never told a girl I love her so
And how I’d hold her so tight and never let her go
But in the past I met you and I made you an exception
Sometimes were rough but I figured we'd prevent the birth of war like contraception
However lately I feel that telling you how I felt was a bad idea
And for me to harbor these feelings has always been my fear
I’ve written you poems like Answer me and My 11 Questions
But answering one out of the 11 I gave seems to have you in deep depression
So I answered them for you or how I wish you would in My 11 Replies
But what most don’t know is how it’s read in reality is really sarcastic lies
Then you asked me how I felt about you so that’s when I wrote You are the Sun
I felt maybe that’ll inspire you to love me then maybe you’ll be The One
I expressed that you were my love and called you My Sunshine
Told you I’ll always love you and shared by feelings deeply through every line
I even tried to play it cool by writing Just remember and truly I felt great
I even risked my free life with Is it a crime but then I drifted back off to Hate
You said we’d be together forever so I already prepared the way I’d say I do
Then if that didn’t go as planned in my mind I thought of a better way I’d say I’ll miss you
I loved you so dear but it seems I should’ve just left you being 4ever my friend
It’s hard for me cause now I’m fallin out of love and apart is not how I wished it would end.
Copyright 2/2/09 ©® Corey Threet
PLEASE COMMENT!
You write with the heart of a mature man, sensitive and ever so endearing.I hope she knows what she had. A 10
There are a few mistakes in this but other than that I find it loving and a great piece.
I absolutely love that you allude to your other poems in this piece. It hooks me in and makes me want to know what the others are about. Bravo
Great poem. though the 'sentences' were a bit long for my taste. but all in all wonderful. it makes us all understand what you've been going through. the monologue used really conveys ur emotion.
Make poetry like this and any school who appreciates poetry will want you :) I love the Monolouge and the trick with the other poems :) just beautiful
yooh really kno how ta make a grl squeal i mean lyke yooh touched ma heart and ma soul. I wish i knu tha feelin dat yooh felt, or tha emotions that yooh go thru bt i cnt. but all n all its a wonderful poem
Nice contrast of what is and what isn't. The absence of dialogue was replaced by a monologue.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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