Family Poem by dafydd jabber redman

Family

Rating: 5.0


I see the Sand nice and gritty soft through my toes like if it warm, wrath as a smothy love is not in me only a lower process. of grovey singing a sad song in a my heart is beating., me down in a small soft breeze i see the leaves slowly rolling down the tree. never more owing the heart of the trees, walking through the park gates of life my kid's are playing a they should be laughing for joy. dad come and pay for that we want an ice gream thats the way life should be, sat by there mum wail she looks at me and smiles as i give my wife a strawberry flowered rose saying i am now free. from sand beneath my feet. and all the hell has gone from in side me, i live the life as i don't party, a grait to love my family.

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
At the time I did not care about my wife or my kid's all I did is party
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Dafydd Paul Redman 19 March 2015

Thank you Mr dave walker, thank you professor kumarmani mahakul for your feedback

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Kumarmani Mahakul 18 March 2015

I see the Sand nice and gritty... Really very nice composition shared here. Nice poem on family topic.

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Dave Walker 18 March 2015

It sounds like you have learned from your mistakes, an honest poem.

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