Valerie Dohren

Gold Star - 5,728 Points (13 January 1947 / Southport)

Final Song - Poem by Valerie Dohren

Hush my love, don’t fret and fuss -
now there’s just the two of us.

We’ll dream together, here below
the darkened sky,
the moon’s soft glow,

as we recall the time, now passed,
before there was a shadow cast
upon the world that once we knew,
when all was well for me and you.

Let’s gaze into the mirror long,
to see ourselves, both sure and strong -
there’s naught to fear, there’s nothing wrong -

and we will sing our final song.


Comments about Final Song by Valerie Dohren

  • John Richter (4/7/2015 8:12:00 AM)

    Empty nesters? Alone, in the end, that farewell to everything once known, and hello to everything new.... Remember going off to kindergarten? Losing the sanctity of everything you knew, mornings with mother, comforting love, off to something unknown, something different, something outside that of so familiar comfort zone, scared, lagging, hesitating - dreading the change... It was a Saturday in 1965 when my school was registering new kindergarten students so dad was home that day. He loaded the wagon with everyone, all the kids and mom, and headed for that school. With seven of us kids it was easy to get lost in the count. I told myself I was a big boy, I wasn't afraid - that's not why I didn't get in the car.... I saw a fly in the kitchen and decided it was more important to spend that early afternoon at home with a flyswatter - ridding our home of those petulant pests. I certainly didn't have time to go gallivanting around at some school. Mom and Dad didn't notice I wasn't there until they got to the school. Eventually I ended up in that class though, with Mrs. Hawkins, who was spending her very first year as a teacher. And I fell absolutely madly in love with her. I emailed her 40 years later during her very last year of teaching at that same school. I didn't think she would remember me, but she said that it was her first year of teaching and she fell in love with me too, could never forget me. In '08 she came to my father's funeral. I hugged her for the first time in 43 years. I'm glad that I went to that class. I think empty nesting is gonna be kind of the same... (Report) Reply

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  • Diane Hine Diane Hine (7/25/2013 7:03:00 AM)

    A comforting and companionable duet. (Report) Reply

  • Patricia Grantham Patricia Grantham (7/24/2013 9:51:00 AM)

    A final song but not a final love! The singing of a beautiful love song ads
    fuel to the fire that is already burning with love notes. The fire of love is not
    easily extinguished by words nor by songs. A beautiful write again Val. (Report) Reply

  • Unwritten Soul Unwritten Soul (7/15/2013 10:04:00 AM)

    Hope not a final song because this is so good....should make an album :) haha_Soul (Report) Reply

  • Elena Sandu Elena Sandu (7/10/2013 6:34:00 PM)

    Your wonderful poem made me wonder: Must we have said a farewell, to have the precious flower of eternal love? Thank you for share dear Valerie, another poem of yours to love! (Report) Reply

  • Kelvin Owusu Kelvin Owusu (7/10/2013 3:50:00 AM)

    such a Beautiful piece could you play this on an acoustic? nicely penned (Report) Reply

  • Vipins Puthooran Vipins Puthooran (7/9/2013 5:20:00 AM)

    to sing the final song together/ a romantic poem/well-express'd! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Tarobinson1103@gmail.com Robinson Tarobinson1103@gmail.com Robinson (7/4/2013 3:25:00 PM)

    The final song is one of freedom releasing the love in each of the others heart. (Report) Reply

  • Chandra Thiagarajan (7/3/2013 10:11:00 AM)

    An emotional romantic poem that is touching! Enjoyed, Valerie! (Report) Reply

  • Heather Wilkins Heather Wilkins (7/2/2013 12:57:00 PM)

    a good read. nice romantic poem (Report) Reply

  • Meena Mustafa Meena Mustafa (7/2/2013 9:17:00 AM)

    Such a lovely poem. Full of emotions. Great penning Val. (Report) Reply

  • Valsa George Valsa George (7/2/2013 3:31:00 AM)

    Why should it be the final song? You can continue to sing, for music is the food of love!
    Sweet and Lovely! (Report) Reply

  • Yasmeen Khan Yasmeen Khan (7/1/2013 1:57:00 AM)

    Your poem is delightful and strongly optimistic. Love is a power that helps us to stand tall and not fearing our last song, it stirs like any good poem. (Report) Reply

  • Sandra Feldman (6/29/2013 11:26:00 PM)

    So tender, , so bitter-sweet, so sad
    Only the very great poets can stir up this emotional tempest (Report) Reply

  • Hans Vr Hans Vr (6/29/2013 8:38:00 PM)

    The love and emotion are palpable when reading this poem.
    Very moving, extremely beautiful.
    A masterpieces, Val (Report) Reply

  • Mary Forrester (6/29/2013 2:36:00 PM)

    So moving Valerie, you truly speak from the heart. (Report) Reply

  • Hazel Durham Hazel Durham (6/29/2013 2:15:00 PM)

    Stunning write with powerful intensity, beautifully written! (Report) Reply

  • Dinesh Nair Dinesh Nair (6/29/2013 11:16:00 AM)

    .... in this togetherness of your own let the sweet song be sung and preceding that why don`t you whisper your sweet nothings into the ears of each other?
    Yet another fine Valerie write indeed! (Report) Reply

  • Tirupathi Chandrupatla Tirupathi Chandrupatla (6/29/2013 7:41:00 AM)

    Casting of the shadow - a subtle way to bring in the unpleasant - and then to look in the mirror. Beautiful poem of great depth of feelings. (Report) Reply

  • ..... W@king Up..... ..... W@king Up..... (6/29/2013 5:21:00 AM)

    Brilliant poem right here :) I loved how you introduced rhyme.it makes it so heartfelt :)

    -W (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, June 27, 2013

Poem Edited: Sunday, June 30, 2013


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