First Dance Poem by Neha Dua

First Dance

Rating: 5.0


Like an infant in the cradle
I rocked in his arms and penned this fable

The sweet lucid lyrics of the song
Made me forget right and wrong

He looked at me as if a rainbow in the sky
My heart skipped a beat and I felt so shy

My silky black hair acted as a veil
But his one touch and I let myself sail

He held me close and his lips touched mine
As if a thirsty soul tasted french wine

My fingers then reached his curly hair
Ang got entwined without care

I envisioned our future in those moments so pure
He is my soulmate my heart said for sure

The time should stand still was my wish
I know I was acting childish

One last embrace and that will be all
For I have to rush back before my dad's call

Mesmerized by the thought of that beautiful evening
I am writing this while his intoxicatins smell still lingering..

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Mystic Indian 21 August 2009

Very emotive piece of work, values that are now 'poetic' and not to be seen around us - and makes one yearn to go back to the media-influence free innocent days. 'For I have to rush back before my dad's call ' - There's so much love here as well. A straight 10/10 and my vote for your honest and beautiful work.

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Lisa Emry 29 March 2007

excellent write. There is such a mystery of the first dance and you captured it perfectly. especially with the like 'for I have to rush back before my dads call' I know that one all too well... Good job!

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Kee Thampi 29 March 2007

it is like a good oracle of soft corners.....but Dad is still dear One last embrace and that will be all For I have to rush back before my dad's call this talent makes best for us....

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Aashish Ameya 29 March 2007

emotion nicely pen down...good poem...

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