Danny Draper

Rookie - 481 Points (14 July 1963 / Kiama, New South Wales, Australia)

For The Longest Time - Poem by Danny Draper

They wore it an each day shirt
Spring tide of native tongue,
Pollen grains dust 'n' fury
Ticked days fell from union,
And laid
for the longest time.

They chanced upon
The life cleft beauty,
Sullen indolent skin
Ambient with cold earth,
And talked
for the longest time.

They watched over
The dispersing elements,
Disinterested in transgressors
Detached from accusation,
And lingered
for the longest time.

They felt unsure
As marrow lost its days,
History laid and tattered
Fragmented perception,
And disconnected
for the longest time.

They looked away
From forlorn white bones,
Covered by time and its
Accreted specks,
And wondered
for the longest time.

They stayed snagged
Without desire of flight,
Above, below and throughout
Invigorated unseen essence,
And waited
for the longest time.

They saw hands
From a curtain drawn,
A malevolent form
Now at silent peace,
And understood
for the longest time.

They realised relief
From ageless consternation,
Unclenched all disbelief
Welcoming consideration,
And finally released,
Drifted away.

Comments about For The Longest Time by Danny Draper

  • Gold Star - 8,398 Points Francis Lynch (11/22/2015 10:19:00 PM)

    Some very strong imagery, particularly in the last three stanzas. But I agree with Madhavan, I'm wrapping my head around some obscurities. Extremely fine effort. (Report) Reply

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  • Bronze Star - 2,502 Points A. Madhavan (11/22/2015 7:58:00 PM)

    When reading a new poem, I try to get the writer's tone of voice, the content that I can paraphrase,
    the rhythm, cadences, structure, the imaginative novelty, the images that seem apt, and finally,
    my own wish to read it again. Some contributions are, to me, beyond these norms, if the
    metaphors are jumbled up and abstractions are personified. Sorry, I cannot make out an each day
    shirt, springtide of native tongue, pollen grains dust'n' fury in the opening verse.
    I recall some writer saying it is more difficult to write good prose than obscure poetry. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 39,911 Points Mohammed Asim Nehal (11/22/2015 12:15:00 PM)

    Articulate poem indeed...They saw hands
    From a curtain drawn,
    A malevolent form
    Now at silent peace,
    And understood
    for the longest time. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,554 Points Manonton Dalan (11/22/2015 7:58:00 AM)

    this reminds me of a song..... (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 12,268 Points Souren Mondal (11/22/2015 6:41:00 AM)

    'They realised relief
    From ageless consternation,
    Unclenched all disbelief
    Welcoming consideration,
    And finally released,
    Drifted away.'

    Wow! Simply wow! For all the poems I have read today, this one stands out to be most well-articulated and carefully, almost painstrickingly, crafted to perfection. The meaning(s) , of course, is entirely open to interpretations of the readers which is an amazing thing. Maybe this poem was about 'they' leaving their fleshly bodies and going to a spiritual path (their souls wandering around before they reach heaven? ?) .. Hard to be certain about.. But a wonderfully crafted poem Danny.. Thanks and respect.. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 13,933 Points Ratnakar Mandlik (11/22/2015 5:05:00 AM)

    Beautiful and meaningful poem. Enjoyed it's rhyme. Thanks for sharing.10 points. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,060 Points Paul Reed (11/22/2015 3:28:00 AM)

    Elusive but receptive to our own interpretations. A thousand different meanings. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 4,112 Points Diane Hine (7/27/2013 6:41:00 AM)

    You show appreciation and respect for spiritual beliefs which you don't share in this spellbinding poem with its gentle yet insistent pulse and soothing resolution. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 5,215 Points Walterrean Salley (7/5/2013 9:12:00 PM)

    A poem beautifully written, whose meaning is somewhat cryptic to the reader. The deep thoughts of a deep mind Danny. We thank you for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 18,468 Points Lyn Paul (7/2/2013 7:47:00 PM)

    A magical flow of words with an unknown story behind. Beauty, sadness and now peace. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 4,678 Points Valerie Dohren (7/2/2013 2:29:00 PM)

    Above my head too Danny - an explanatory note would have helped. But it is well crafted and enigmatic. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 12,375 Points Douglas Scotney (6/30/2013 8:48:00 PM)

    sensitive, and never sought a reason why,
    unless 'why' was 'ageless consternation' (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,483 Points Shahzia Batool (6/30/2013 4:33:00 AM)

    A challenging read indeed!
    so one can take a due advantage of the statement that poetry is open to interpretation depending on the whims of the readers...when i didn't get anything from the poem, i resorted to comments, which are written neutral, denying any clue to what it is all about...now i think some weaving about the lives of those who are suppressed beings in any capacity, politically suppressed i suppose...and they too in an attitude of a long caged bird which has lost the art of flight, and the will to escape! ! ! (it is all supposed, might be wrong completely) , but for the poem, its language is reader-friendly, when you start you end it too! ! ! thanks! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 5,077 Points Paul Brookes (6/30/2013 4:02:00 AM)

    An elegant and softly flowing poem like silver water. Your use of language so beautiful that I just drifted away 10/10 BB (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 159 Points R.benjamin Abate (6/29/2013 9:30:00 AM)

    Nice Ending. I really like the language here. Your choice of words is perfect and I'll be listing this one as one of my favorites. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,669 Points Elena Sandu (6/28/2013 5:49:00 PM)

    Challenging poem! I read careful and wonder who are they? Asking myself: human? ..naah too nicely described also they always have a great desire of flight. Could be some sort of seeds or many other things, what about trees? Worms? Ashes? Gee, this is quite beautiful and deep, read it again and again each time will blow my mind away! Giving up I may never guess the right answer. Great food for thought, thank you for share! (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,494 Points Unwritten Soul (6/28/2013 10:04:00 AM)

    Agreed with all here, deep and beautiful...as much look alike a valley with hidden treasure...have to read many times to feel it..lovely and deep_SOul (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 45,404 Points Valsa George (6/28/2013 7:40:00 AM)

    With your explanation, now I get the beauty of the poem! Indeed esoteric and too deep for the average! This is above ranking! Thanks for the kind comments.... Danny! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 45,404 Points Valsa George (6/28/2013 2:51:00 AM)

    As Bob has rightly put, this is too deeeep! ! I made some vain efforts to explicate it.... but still remains elusive! From the state of remaining stagged without desire of flight, finally they got relieved from ageless consternation! A positive note? ? (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 211 Points R.j. Wynn (6/27/2013 11:42:00 AM)

    Deeeeeeep Danny Deeeeeep! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, June 26, 2013

Poem Edited: Thursday, July 25, 2013

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