Freemysoul Poem by persian khushi
Freemysoul
Of my soul to be free
My being echoes Your name
My heart yearned to chant the greatness of You
My lips tasted Your Blessings
But I was not yet ready to receive You
Now that I accepted the past
Embraced the present
My true heritage
Of Persian decent
I've always felt it
Deep down I have always known
With Your guidance
And with each step to the future
The lies surrounding me dispersed
My life
My purpose in life came clear
I am but a speck of dust in Your universe
To be tested by You and serve You
I am now contented
Your Blessings the Greatest
My being echoes You
My heart chants Your name
My lips taste You
I love You and Your Beloved
I am free
My dear sister, i think Gibson is correct, especialy about the first line...but i can feel that, the poem is from your heart..keep writing..Siya_! !
I think I know the sort of poem you strive to create. Some lines are fine others need a little more editing. here is also the chance you might be trying a little too hard. What might happen if you lost the first line: 'Of my soul to be free' I feel it is not needed. can you see why? Best
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/25/2024 7:24:48 AM # 1.0.0.1119
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