Giving Up The Battle Poem by kimber harrison

Giving Up The Battle

Rating: 4.8


A million tears I cry,
why can't at least one take away the pain?
A million fears I hide,
why can't, at least one, my heart face?
A million questions asked,
why can't at least one I get an anwser to?
A million years have past,
why can't time change the things I do?
A million dreams I've dreamt,
why can't one give me hope?
A million mistakes un-meant,
why can't one teach me to cope?

Why can't I just be free?
Why am I held back with these chains of doubt?
Why can I not just be?
Why can't I just get out?

I'm held back!
I want to be released!
My body goes slack,
I've given up...finally..

I never thought myself a quiter,
I always stuck it through.
But sometimes, when your in a battle,
...you just have to lose.


P/N: There have been A LOT (well, like maybe 3, but whatever)
and I need everyone who reads this to know
it IS NOT BASED ON PERSONAL EXPERIENCE!
I am a very happy and healthy child.
I don't have thoughts like this...well ever.
I wrote it because I could sympathize, NOT empathize,
what OTHER people are going through.
Hope you enjoy.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kesav Easwaran 13 May 2009

good write...liked the the way the inside intense pain expressed there...eloquent lines...10

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Brianna Trombley 02 May 2009

i actually liked this one even though you didnt think it was that good, the end verse is very strong, really makes the point, this one kinda hits home, im sure a lot of people feel this way, but i hope that battle isnt the one they choose to lose

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Robert Macdonald 01 May 2009

I can really feel your pain in this poem. I recommend you keep writing poetry because a lot of people can identify with what you're going through, and poems like this can give people hope and assurance that they are not the only ones. Beautiful write.

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yes u have to lose but it doesnt mean u have to surrender.. come on fight i got ur back =) u can count on me friend..great poem full of emotion..bravo!

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