Grubs And Disire Poem by DAVID GERARDINO

Grubs And Disire

Rating: 4.8


LIGHTING struck the
ground you walk on,
LIKE a spear, it hits
a vein.IT bleeds, and
bleeds.
INSECTS,
TERMITES,
break the mussle of
love, from the inside,
only the inside.
THE out side is painted
up like a whore, working
the night, still there
is hope, so much hope,
when you take off your
clouths, and wash away
this sin....AMEN

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Allan James Saywell 20 January 2006

when i read this poem it made me think about what a woman with a loose morality said to me way back in my past she said a quick wash will wipe away my guilt and i thought to myself will she wash her soul as well good write david regards AJS

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Michael Voorhis 20 January 2006

I like the poem, but it just seems like you capitalize the wrong words. Its completely up to you how you write your poetry, but when you capitalize a whole word, you are usually trying to put emphasis on it.The words 'like' or 'the' really dont need emphasis in my opinion. Nice poem anyway, Michael

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