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You say you need me in your life
You pledge undying love -
But there are places in your world
That you can't rise above;
You say I mean the world to you
You'd sell your soul to spend
Just one more precious moment
If that moment wouldn't end;
Yet every time we try to fit
The pieces all together,
There's always one that's missing
You can never tell me whether
You'll ever find a place for me
Inside your busy life -
One day you think it's all for naught,
Then want me for your wife;
I'm walking on a tightrope
Trying hard to stand my ground,
I think I'm making headway then
I have to turn around;
Nothing ever changes
There's no hope that I can see -
I think I'm finding in your world
There's no place there for me.
Linda Ori
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Alison Cassidy (3/30/2008 2:23:00 AM)
Your facility with traditional form is awesome - it is obviously the perfect springboard for your creative spirit to fly. And the content of your verse is so honestly penned - like a soliloquy in a Shakespeare play, you weigh the two sides of your contemplation and shape the whole with great finesse. I guess all I can say is you can't change them, no matter how hard you try. They are as they are. Such a tenderhearted poem. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ |
Not a member No 4 (3/21/2008 4:08:00 PM)
You boil complexity down to clarity and so make reading your work a real pleasure... but in so doing you make its message more transparent, more immediate, and more heartbreaking... it's a writing strength that I just cannot master! I bow to your skill Linda. I was in this yes/no place once for a long time... and when you decide to finally quit they want you to stay... until they feel secure again... and so it goes.. This one will resonate with many I think... Elegant, fluent, and right to the point as always... sterling work Linda Ori... xxx jim |
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