Independance Day! Poem by Jameel Ahmed Ansari

Independance Day!

Rating: 4.9


I am the 15th august
I am remembered for one day every year
I make you proud every year
I am your life's most memorable august.

I make you feel free,
I give a unique feeling,
You've now got an independent country,
I've given you the most cherished feeling.

I have been your most sought day,
You gave innumerable sacrifices,
Ultimately I came out be your dream day.
I've given your life the best of the rarest prizes.

I am the Independence Day,
I've given you a hope for the future.
You've now got an open cage to live in.
I am your freedom day.

You make unlimited promises on this day,
You take vows to make your nation pride,
You make promises of taking the nation forward,
You plan of making the nation bright.

All your promises remain as promises.
All your plans get buried the next day.
All your aspirations flow along with your celebrations
You barely remember what actually your promises were

You feel patriotic for just one day
You flow into the celebrations the whole day
You proudly wave the national flag around
You keep the flag close to your chest

Eight hours of sleep is enough
To make us forget this memorable day
Weren't the sacrifices more than enough
To make us realize the value of this day

They fought for their lovely country
They died to save their dying Nation
They struggled for the elusive Independence
They had really hoped for a much better Nation

I proudly say I am the Independence Day
I fill your heart with 365 days of vigor
I give you the confidence of building a better Nation
I give you the feeling of making the Nation Bigger

I still see hungry people around
I still see child slaves around
I see people dividing themselves.
I get pained by the different classes around

This is not the Nation they fought for,
This is not the day they fought for.
Let's make a real unanimous vow
Let's promise that we are going to look after the Nation now

I plead you not to treat me as any other day
Let's make everyday as an Independence Day
Let's remove the hatred and spread Love around
I ask you to give some value for this Day
I am 15th August, I am the Independence Day

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Shekhar Joshi 15 August 2009

You’ve now got an open cage to live in.....this line seems satirical to me..... yet another attempt to say what every other person complaining about how we are still not free.......nice attempt to say that again...... some lines were good too though.........all in all an above average poem.......... ;)

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Marieta Maglas 26 August 2009

excellent poem, very well penned with deep ideas.........10+++

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Shahzia Batool 01 January 2012

very good jameel you personified an abstraction very well...being patriotic demands being practical as well

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Aya Amuro Zhou 01 January 2012

This is very well written - a portrays an interesting patriotism with a little hint of satire~ A very well written piece of poetry~

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an interesting poem, Jameel Ahmed..Everyone of us know the problem, but we do not know how to solve the problem..

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Romeo Della Valle 15 April 2012

The title just caught my immediate attention and I said to myself it is worth reading it and guess what: I am right! This well crafted and touching poem is exceptional and clearly shows your honesty and great potential in the Poetry World! Congratulations! WELCOME! Thank you for sharing and keep it up! 10+++ God Bless You! Love and Peace for always! Romeo from New York City!

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Rimjhim Singh 13 January 2012

empowering.this one word's enough, very nice concept. And that title is so eye-catching.well done.

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Dave Walker 02 January 2012

A great idea, a great poem.

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Areeba Sohail 02 January 2012

nicely written! good marks!

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