Insomnia Poem by 0s1 Silver

Insomnia

Rating: 4.3


The night ends with swirling emotions.
Thoughts sharp as a blade,
cutting through sleep.
Flashing lights in darkness,
not in sight but in my mind.
Once again I fall,
into this endless nightmare.

Friday, September 11, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: insomnia,night
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Roseann Shawiak 05 October 2015

Very good imagery, one thing maybe to improve, your sentences are incomplete at times and words that should be plural aren't. (The night end(s)) (Thoughts sharp as (a) blade cutting through rest. - rest of what? incomplete thought) (light(s)) Other than that your work is excellent, I love it! Thank you for sharing. RoseAnn

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0s1 Silver 06 October 2015

Thank you for the feedback, I'll edit it^^ I'm glad that you like it :)

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