Lightning Bolt Poem by Delilah Wilson

Dear Delilah, You've asked for me to comment and I oblige. Poems are People whom feel and express. It can't be measured as poor or best with numbers from 1-10. Your life experience at 15 is a precious time to be writing poetry. I advise you and other youth to write just as you feel and not be guided by anyone's rating. (See my poem 'Critique and Prejudice') I was critiqued wrongly some 22 years ago when just starting to write. That poem was my response that was written quite recently. Especially for 'Budding' literary artists. Here's how I feel about your vividly 'Sketch' poem. It could be a Rhyme lyric with some chorus changes applied. I suggest you try not searching for word rhymes and write and tell it as you see and feel it. Your description may be all the better felt when letting it flow spontaneously. This same advice was given to me, as I now share with you and other fledgling writers, You will find that when writing prose that rhymes will just find them selves where they belong quite naturally. I love the way you wrote your last stanza 'The storm is near increased fear patiently waiting debating ' Now please sketch for us a sequel verbal image that we can experience with you Bravo! Encore! ...louie levy PS Be sure to date all your poems when written, for yourself and readers

Great Poem Delilah 10/10 it was very creative and rhyme in the same time. It open my eyes to new ways of looking at things...Thanks

ThIs Is An AwSoMe PoEm! ! I lOvEd It, I lOvE lIgHtNiNg! ! KeEp WrItTiNg PoEmS, tOtAlY SWEET! ! wElL iM aLl DoNe HeRe, TaLk To YoU l8tErZ =)

This poem is cool! I can see how it's supposed to look like lightning...shame it didn't work... but its gr8 anyway! Well done! :) I love lightning... love this poem... thanks Athena :) xx

This poem is SOOOO awesome...it's supposed to look like a lightning bolt btw but the web messed up the format