Love Revised Poem by Chrispin Johnson

Love Revised



The flower needs sun as I need you
my love is burning bright and true
your touch I yearn when we’re apart
I need you feed my beating heart

You’re in the eager air I breathe, your
eyes in shining stars from skies above,
your smile a warming summer breeze
which melts the coldest heart with love.

Your absence is a day of dismal view
but sunshine always springs from you
my cloudy days you put to easy flight
my melancholy brightened with your light.

Dedicated to all the lovely ladies out there.

Thanks to Ivan Donn Carswell for the revision

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Jasmine Margetson 27 November 2008

this poem is so graceful..well written..like a classic lovestory

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Jona`e Levett 12 June 2008

this is much better! i did enjoi the revised version more.. but it seems a diffrent poem more than a revision. i love a few stanzas that particularly stood out. 'Your absence is a day of dismal view but sunshine always springs from you ' and 'your touch I yearn when we’re apart I need you feed my beating heart ' it was a fresh and spun view of your poem and i loved it. good night, love love

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