Memory Poem by basim al aoda

Memory

Rating: 4.8


Memory


Between your hands, .
The time stops!
And from your hands –
Birds flock fly,
In complete poem.
Some seek to the departure,
Others seek to assemble,
And, I spread my soul round it,
Neither it remains nor leaves,
How much, I ask the jasmine flowers? !
Does n't leave us and depart?
But we in lost and missed it,
We saw at the horizon,
Childhood shadow-
Proceed to it.

Basim Al Aoda 2008

COMMENTS OF THE POEM

Well done Basim Al Aoda, You talk with Jasmine like Neruda for leave or depart. birds flock fly. Beautiful pictures and imagination (I spread my soul around it) and contradictions (remains nor leaves) , and with the hope (Childhood) to approach. I give you 9+. Keep working...improving the wording, enriching the language.Bravo Joseph Josephides Member of the International Society of Poets (ISP) Intern.Library of Poetry awarded

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Sarwar Chowdhury 20 September 2008

...a fine composition indeed..........10+

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Sometimes the mind plays tricks and memories play hide and seek.Very nice poem.I gave you ten.Keep writting.....

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