John Garth Raubenheimer (21/12/1947 / Johannesburg)

lovely poem liked it wahtever is said is truly true............must say good use of metaphors and similes :)

Today I succumbed to the consensus and shortened Murder

I know it's long and I could work on it to make it shorter - but do I want to change what an exuberant 28 year old poet wrote, in a burst of passion. To me at 63 that feels like a kind of censorship

Lovely. I loved it.

Yes, it is a little too long. The intent gets lost in too many words. The thought is wonderful and well stated in many stanzas. This good poem could become a great poem with a little rework.
Adeline

What a great poem John... everything you said is true and murder has come a long way... goes way back to the murder for a birthright we read in the Bible and Im sure we would if only we couldve been a fly on a caves wall, witnessed a murder in a Cavemans abode, for woman or food or jealousy. Even a mad cavewoman killing maybe a child, for any reason whatsoever murder has been part of life from the begining. And maybe sympathy for murder with reason has been around just as long... who knows.10

I really liked your poem, It was strong and brave. It was a little long, but I didn't care. I loved it

Ummm...too long, though the gist was good

I really enjoyed this, very powerful.
Hugs
Anna xxx