Valsa George


My First Crush


In the sea of faces I saw a face
All in a haze, so filmy
Nothing did I see clearly
But a pair of love lit eyes
Riveted on me
My heart skipped a beat
Did my face grow pale?
Or got coloured by a blush?
I lowered my eyes
And looked away

But I saw him advancing
Coming straight to me

My heart began to race
My breath got hitched
My lips went dry and parched
I didn’t hear what he asked
Words got stuck in my throat
When they came
They came out broken and raspy
I felt as if struck
By congenital paralysis
Unable to move my facial muscles
Either to utter a word
Or curve my lips into a smile!

Felt butterflies in my stomach
A tremor took over my hands and legs
Beads of sweat appeared on my brow
My mind went blank
The world came to a sudden halt
Forgot where I was
I got frozen in time

This is how I felt
When I had my first crush!

Not knowing the futility of adolescent yearning
For long, I juggled with his unspoken words
“I L….O….V…..E you!

Submitted: Friday, May 09, 2014
Edited: Monday, May 12, 2014

Topic of this poem: Love


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  • Rookie - 641 Points Saadat Tahir (6/21/2014 2:17:00 AM)

    the poem is powerful and charming...
    the strong yet tender feelings; kind of grow on one...

    going on and on with no end in sight...almost welcome....just like the real thing
    a superb effect has been created by stressing on the feelings

    written from..that unique perspective... ;)
    lovely

    liked (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 5,319 Points Geetha Jayakumar (6/20/2014 11:37:00 AM)

    Beautiful poem Valsa..Many captivating lines.

    My heart skipped a beat
    Felt butterflies in my stomach
    A tremor took over my hands and legs
    Beads of sweat appeared on my brow....Fantastic lines which add beauty to the First Crush. You have captured words very well in this poem. Enjoyed reading it. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 5,755 Points Amitava Sur (6/3/2014 10:29:00 PM)

    It's a wonderful poem Valsa. What I Will say... You have awaken me Just now at this moment I am feeling to say I L O V E Y O U ...... Ha Ha Ha....... Just amazing! ! ! ! ! ! ! 10 in 10 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 421 Points Shahzia Batool (6/1/2014 1:01:00 PM)

    i find innocence ruling in this poem, i can only say we are blessed to read a gifted hand on pH! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 16,644 Points Akhtar Jawad (5/26/2014 1:44:00 AM)

    Any thing related to opposite sex is always interesting. How a woman feels when she falls in love is some thing very exciting to know by the men. You have so beautifully painted the picture that I wished I would have read this poem in my teen age. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 650 Points Loyd C. Taylor, Sr. (5/25/2014 2:28:00 PM)

    Hello poet Valsa. Thank you for your recent review. I enjoyed your poem and have been in those shoes before, you described it precisely! Loyd (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,920 Points Paul Sebastian (5/16/2014 11:44:00 AM)

    Beautiful, teenage innocence confessed. Poignant yet it gave me a chuckle of the little girl's first encounter!
    Great write! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,505 Points Dinesh Nair (5/13/2014 7:54:00 PM)

    There you are madam.. Fine rendering, innocent and candid speaking of thoughts. But not awaiting to read the tale of the next crush if any.. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 13,121 Points Deepak Kumar Pattanayak (5/13/2014 12:01:00 AM)

    Things at first sight brought to a jolt that ended in a safe landing of love.............Valsa........what a wonderful poetic
    reminiscence and write as well................... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 222 Points Marie Shine (5/12/2014 3:07:00 AM)

    Memories of teenage years exquisitely recalled and narrated to your reader, dear Valsa, in this excellently penned poem. Brought back memories for me too! Oh, to be 16 again! ! ! A very emotional write, which pin points all the symptoms of a first crush and took me, your reader back in time, to the point where I too, re-experienced the butterflies dancing in clogs all around my tummy, the racing heartbeat, shaky hands and cold sweat breaking out - it's all there and so finely expressed. The poem has a beautiful flow to it, absolutely effortless and I so enjoyed reading it, dear Valsa. Wonderful work! Thank you for sharing and for the brief trip down Memory Lane. Blessings always... (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 3,543 Points Tirupathi Chandrupatla (5/11/2014 10:26:00 AM)

    First crush leading to a safe landing beautifully described. The tempo continued to the last line. Thank you for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 984 Points Kee Thampi (5/10/2014 9:44:00 PM)

    when ever read a poem.......it swallow our emotions to, really feel here
    Felt butterflies in my stomach
    A tremor took over my hands and legs
    Beads of sweat appeared on my brow (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 5,739 Points Salini Nair (5/10/2014 6:50:00 AM)

    a good feel of first crush....this may be the feel of first crush for most of them...like it... (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,232 Points Tajudeen Shah (5/10/2014 1:45:00 AM)

    Ah! its yet another wonderful piece for me to engage myself visualizing the experience of those past friends. It felt so real, beautiful, innocent and natural. Hard to believe its a shoot of diction from the tender plant of imagination, watered with passions. hm....wonderful, and a representative feeling of the young mass. (Report) Reply

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