My Honey Bite Poem by Asif Baloch

The flower smiles to sunny ray Dancing and swaying breezy way Waiting for its love all day long Wanting to be kissed by buzzy sound A moth doth live for just a day Waits for night to hug flamed ray It dies every second just to rise To hold her, kiss her once a life Sun flower loves with depths and highs Glaring without a blink from dusk to rise Just a single glimpse would be enough for life After that there wont, be any regret or denies I honeslty Love this part It is True that Some moments in our Lives worth Our Life in Whole Well Done And i Loved your images Mainly the Moth Image Great

a good read.........well penned

'Just a single glimpse would be enough for life After that there wont, be any regret or denies ' golden lines i believe and behold...many a man lives for a glimpse and dies for that glimpse' many live for love and die just for the lack of it.....love drives the soul! a compassionate write....aijaz...ur soul is seen here! regards seema

I like the openings of this poem - and the archaic English used. The first few lines are very emotive, and with good imagery. Just a little too long I suggest, as these pieces read better a little shorter. Just a thought though, as you have already a good talent for the narrative and emotive Asif. Well done and keep writing.

Loved this poem, sir. Expressed with utmost emotions. Thank you.

such beautiful words! ! ! ! !

A wonderful poem. U get 10++...................

Good use of similies; well expressed poem. The sudden change of the structure into a longer lined stanza in the last one changed the tempo; speeded up the feelings............good technique........10

beautiful! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! really -this made me speechless amaged at the metaphorical sounds created throught ---specially the last stanza --- the moth --- --the flame---the sunflower ---the beees A+++++++ and 10++++++ goes strrrrrrrrrrrrraight to my fav list regards anju

well is full honey and lovely, full hehe