My Rain Poem by Jazmin OK...

My Rain

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You used to make my rain look beautiful.
Sparkling droplets of love
That one message from you
I would think about all day
You shone in my heart
Every second
And in my dreams and fantasies
Of everything we could be
No one knew about us
Not even now
They used to look at me like I was crazy
And I was.
Crazy in love.
You took me along with you
Further than I’ve been before.
I was overflowing with you
I couldn’t help myself.

But then
The silence came
The butterflies took flight
The flowers faded
Our buildings crumbled
The sun hid behind
A dark cloud of absence
That rose into my heart
Everything lost its joy
That day.

Once you tried
To say hello
And I couldn’t
I just couldn’t say it
After all we’ve been through
Just hello?
But I whispered to myself
“You just can’t risk another goodbye”
And then choked back
My tears.

You used to make my rain look beautiful.
Sparkling droplets of hope.

Saturday, March 28, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: beautiful,beauty,hope,love,memory,past,rain,tears
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Daniel Brick 15 August 2015

YOU USED TO MAKE MY RAIN LOOK BEAUTIFUL - what a striking image to convey how the affection we feel for someone spills out into the world and makes the world itself more beautiful. But unrequited love is a trickster. You cannot sustain the positive mood you're in without the reality of returned affection fueling it. What I take from your poem is readiness and promise. The speaker is ready to be a partner in a love relationship, and when it finally happens for real, she will be so committed to its success, it cannot fail (that's the promise in your poem!) .

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Kelly Kurt 06 April 2015

A lovely poem, Kenzo. Thanks for sharing.

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