*ocean Revery Poem by Ben Gieske

*ocean Revery

Rating: 2.8


ocean's pounding surf
reoccuring memories
trying to forget

a sea gull's keen eyes
ocean's stroking ablutions
my daily failings

a forest beckons
across this untainted field
fresh snow innocence

footprints in the snow
wherever your beauty hides
I'll willingly go

waking to your beauty
finding your quiet waters
ecstasy of love

- August 16,2008

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Serena 16 February 2018

This is beautiful to read

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Sonya Florentino 08 December 2009

beautiful...the different emotions tied to nature...and the progression to the end is quite magical.....

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Yelena M. 10 November 2009

What a remembrance to savour and imagine..love the structure, too, suits your dream perfectly. Thanks for sharing. Yelena M.

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Lillian Thomas 11 September 2009

These are very interesting and thought-provoking verses, each almost independent of each other with only the finest strand linking them. Did this start out as a group of linked haiku? only one exceeds the 5/7/5. They read like haiku in that they all have reference to nature, season, and a juxtaposition of two images, leaving the reader some work to do to finish the poem. Am I wrong?

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walking to your beauty.............. ectasy of love...... fresh breath did i breath when your wondrous work i read today it enlightened me today more made me see.

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