One Beautiful Night Poem by Hira Akhtar

One Beautiful Night

Rating: 4.8


Night travelling to reach the day
Riding in the chariot
Moon playing hide and seek
Peeping through clouds
Stars making mischieves in the moonlight
The giggling wind awakening the trees
Colourful buds anxious to bloom
He and I, together sitting ashore
Free of worries,
Free of gloom
Everything becoming quiet and silent
I can hear his heartbeat and he can mine
As we are waking and the whole world is asleep
Sea waves dancing and clamouring delightfully
His shining eyes staring at me with a glee
My shying face beside hands fascinates him
Makes him happy
Makes him uncomfortable
Putting his head on my lap
He talks to me, I talk to him
Stroking his head without any fear
We talk for hour hours, as the time has stopped
He loves my smiling face
And promises to give happiness always
Losing myself into his eyes
Seeing the ocean of love striking against the shore
I have drowned in it with my wish and desire
Seems as if the nature enjoys
Giving a chance to fly like a bird above the heights
Praying God never to rise the Sun
Let the doomsday come
For it is not less than that
He comes nearer as the fragrance to flower
Taking my face into his hands
Going me to kiss on the forehead
The warmth of his love is warmer than the fire
I am burning in it from head to toe
My eyes are closed and the heart beat stops
The sea having anxiety and the sky waiting eagerly
The stars whisper and the moon smiles
But the Sun up there misses the sight
His soft lips touch me and I feel a thrill
With this a tear of happiness at once drops
Suddenly my eyes open and what i see? ?
It was my dream
It was my dream..............

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
I have choosen diffrent topics so i thought to write on this topic also.Its imaginary....Thanks
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 20 August 2013

this was the work of a fine imagination! ! ! thanks for the poet note. and what a surprise ending! i never came close to having or even imagining such experiences when i was 15, some of the ways you express images and feelings are very, very nice, such as The giggling wind awakening the trees Colourful buds anxious to bloom and: The stars whisper and the moon smiles this may now be my favorite one so far. i'll send it to my Poemlist. :)

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Bri Edwards 20 August 2013

i just looked at the title again! i guess i should not have been surprised by the ending. maybe other readers (with better memories than mine) would also be surprised if the title was changed to not give away the ending.

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Hira Akhtar 24 August 2013

Yess Sir! ! I agree with you... Thank a lot..So you think sir i should change the title? ?

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Bri Edwards 26 August 2013

Hira, i think this is a fine choice to enter into contest! i will however send a couple of suggestions to you in a separate message. good luck. you have done very well my friend. bri

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Unwritten Soul 28 September 2013

This is beautiful poem, Good luck for you in this competition, Bri bought me here_Soul

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Bhagabat prasad hotta 24 June 2019

Beautiful poem. So nice poem. Thanks for sharing your poetic thoughts 100++++++++7+++

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Konab Ghumman 10 March 2019

what a beautiful poem. It was my dream.. lovly expressions

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Dr Antony Theodore 08 March 2019

Colourful buds anxious to bloom He and I, together sitting ashore Free of worries, Free of gloom Everything becoming quiet and silent........the warmth of love expressed in such a powerful manner. thank u dear poetess. tony

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Jagdish Singh Ramána 25 January 2019

wonderful dear friend! lovely content and wonderful imagery it was my dream........ it was my dream...........- very clever.!

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Dr Antony Theodore 10 May 2017

The warmth of his love is warmer than the fire I am burning in it from head to toe My eyes are closed and the heart beat stops... What a beautiful dream very nice poem. imaginative.. thank you dear poetess

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