Opinions Poem by Beach Girl

Opinions

Rating: 3.1


Opinions

It's all been said, hasn't it?

Then why am I compelled?

Grabbed pen and then, with a click

Wrote verse my heart's withheld


I think the moon was laughing

As she heard my lame refrains

She hid her face for a while

Clouds covering her disdain


She said my verse were lousy

That poems don't need to rhyme

My imagery was childlike

She thinks I should resign


It broke my heart to hear her

Reject my best attempts

Slammed down my pen and notebook

Upset by her comments


I Said:


Oh moon, you are quite lovely

The queen of Earth's dark nights

The stars all bow before you

An army dressed in white


But soon you'll lose your glory

A new light will have won

Next time I want opinions

I think I'll ask the Sun

Monday, September 2, 2013
Topic(s) of this poem: poetry
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Khairul Ahsan 02 September 2013

Quarrel between two beauties! However, your poems are pretty alright. Don't need to ask either the sun or the moon.

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Marcus Mckinley 05 September 2013

the moon has a partial prosaic view being rather plain in its own image. the sun on the other hand is mysterious in its grandeur and casting a comprehensive view upon the universe. nicely written

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Gajanan Mishra 02 September 2013

ask the sun, The sun knows everything. good write. I invite you to read my poems and comment.

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Chinedu Dike 25 September 2019

Well expressed thoughts and feelings. A poignant work of art.......................

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Bri Edwards 21 March 2015

well, i looked at it again. it is STILL a truly beautiful AND clever poem. :) bri

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Beach Girl 18 January 2015

You are right of course Bri! I've corrected the error! Thanks so much. :)

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Patricia Grantham 19 September 2013

I enjoyed this very refreshing write on the moon and the sun. I do believe that the moon has some kind of influence on the mind, so has the sun. You can't look at any of them for a long period of time. Both are equally important to our existence on earth. You wrote this very well. Regards.

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Shahzia Batool 07 September 2013

i wont agree if the moon forms that opinion, as now i have read your poetry myself...certainly, if given a chance to say something, the moon wont dare to challenge the platform of her praises! ! !

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