Sandra Martyres

Rookie (5th October / Mumbai - India)

Parakeets (Haiku)


Nature's aggressors
parakeets are green meanies
with fetching plumage

Submitted: Monday, June 01, 2009
Edited: Wednesday, June 17, 2009

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  • Rookie Rory Hudson (6/16/2009 7:02:00 AM)

    How does somebody in India know about parakeets? Anyway, this is an effective presentation and works well. Last line, I think the spelling is 'plumage'. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 8 Points Anjali Sinha (6/10/2009 8:15:00 AM)

    O yeh
    we have these budgies here
    they are sooooo cute
    a tenner from me for these natures aggressors
    heheeeeeeeeee (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Ashraful Musaddeq (6/6/2009 4:59:00 AM)

    Wonderful 10+++ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Barbara Terry (6/6/2009 4:21:00 AM)

    A wonderful haiku Sandra, and the parakeet sings so nicely too. A 10+++++ and thank you for sharing.

    Love & hugs,
    Barbara (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Karin Anderson (sorry can't vote or comment) . (6/4/2009 8:07:00 AM)

    Wow Sandra. You are really the mistress of Haiku. I love this clever one too! 10 Karin Anderson (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Catrina Heart (6/4/2009 12:23:00 AM)

    well crafted Japanese haiku............you have described in a profound way! 10+++ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Samanyan Lakshminarayanan (6/2/2009 1:35:00 AM)

    a perfect haiku sandra...aggressors would use their plummage to fly..but this is taught to talk..walk out of the gauge pick up a card to predict our future (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Carl Harris (6/1/2009 1:59:00 PM)

    Anyone familar with the Japanese style of haiku will quickly agree that this is a quite splendid example of the form, Sandra. The phrasing is perfect, as is the syllable count, and the haiku leaves the reader with that one thought to ponder, as is the purpose of all true haiku poems. The imagery of all haiku, which can only be about nature, is designed to give the reader that one clear thought and nothing more or less. That is the wonderfuly simplicity of great haiku and that is what I read in this excellent haiku poem. Carl. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sandra Martyres (6/1/2009 12:28:00 PM)

    thank you Indira and Josephine for your comments....hope the new version is more clear...courtesy Carl Harris...Thanks Carl (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Josephine De Leux (6/1/2009 7:06:00 AM)

    Aren't all parakeets(and parakeets in disguise as other living creatures...) ?
    I go for fetching plummage. nice word, isn't it? 'Very fetching...'
    maybe add an 'a' though. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 302 Points Indira Renganathan (6/1/2009 6:54:00 AM)

    Yes...a catchy plummage...but 'fetching plummage'...is what? ...needs a re-read....good (Report) Reply

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