Ph: Stanford: Softly Off-Colored Poem #1 Poem by Brian Johnston

Ph: Stanford: Softly Off-Colored Poem #1

Rating: 2.5


Green like trees following a river
what choice do they have really
green returning to the ocean after a storm
green emotions
queasiness
waves of sickness
jealousy
grass chewed to puke out poison
even as night falls
a darkly ominous forest tinted sky

greenhouses reflecting early stars' shimmering leaf-like auras
green autos spread like dominos at a drive-in movie
a tricked out goblin's pickup with dark windows and green headlights
and a staticky green light coming from where sun doesn't shine
green voids filling green spaces
Green Peace, with dancers in green tutus and pointe shoes
that skip like moss covered stones
across an ocean deep pond or verdant field

green jeans, green skirts on girls that look like they want to go somewhere
they're ready to go, now!
TAKE ME!
bottles of green beer empty!
what happened to our leprechaun?
Fireworks like galaxies laced with green
jeans, skirts, bras that explode at your touch
smears of green across an impressionistic sky
leaving only softness behind
naked thighs that pillow your head, as you breathe deeply
the smoky green residue that burned into her flesh too

Green musk hangs from twilight's enveloping arms
and covers the saturated moors of imagination
like a morning fog that rises to greet
a vibrant dawn pressing her down
deep into the green

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
Brian Johnston
April 20,2015

Poet's Notes: A new poem from my 4th week in a Stanford continuing education class offered on the internet, this week a study of free verse and structure. We were directed to write as unconsciously as we could for 5 minutes, then after an hour or so to attempt to pull material of interest from what we have written to compose a free verse poem. What follows immediately is my source material for the poem listed above. I hope you enjoy both.

I am planning to do a number of poems using this title. I thought about calling the Poem Colored Poem #1, the Not White Poem #1, but using Softly Dirty Poem #1 to suggest both a touch of color and sensuality was the winning idea and will be the title for each new poem in the series as I complete them, i.e.. Softly Dirty Poem #2 which will be based on the color Orange, etc.

My source material:

Green like a valley following a river, green like an ocean after a storm, green emotions, queasiness, sickness, jealousy, green grass soft to the touch, a green sky ominous calling, green houses, green autos, green paint, a green truck with green headlights and fluorescent under lights that seems ominous, green spaces, Green Peace with dancers in green tutus that skip like green pebbles across a dark green pond, green clothing on girls that look like they want to go somewhere, they simply want to go…. take me! fireworks laced with green like skirts that explode at your touch, leaving only softness behind and hot memories of green smoke.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 15 July 2015

Bri's FORM FOR COMMENTING ON POEMS: [n/a = not applicable to this poem] Poem Comment Form As my shoulder I did abuse, here is what may amuse: A poem-comment “form”; I know it ain’t the norm. But if I write comments TOO long, I’ll never hear the end of the song: “Bri, I Told You, Take Care Of Shoulder; You’re Young No More & Getting Older”. So this simple form I have devised. Don’t look at me! Are you so surprised? If I use the form I MAY have more time … to read more poems with, or without, rhyme. After all, I can’t read and NOT comment, and if you must have MORE input ……….from me … send me a request ……….., though “more” AIN’T free. A. I enjoyed it: Yes ___ ; No___ ; I’m not telling__x_ B. I understood it: Yes_mostly__; No___; I’m not sure___ C. I enjoyed the: Rhyming ___; Rhythm___; Originality___; Cleverness__x_; Humor/Humour___; Seriousness_maybe__; Sensuality__x_; Humanity___; Alliterations__x_; Personal touch_n/a? _; Other __bras________ D. It makes me want to read more of your poems: Yes___; No___; I’m not telling_x__ E. The use of English was: Impeccable/good___; Deplorable/bad___; In between___; No comment_x__ F. Could use proofreading: Yes_x__; No___; You decide_x__ THANKS FOR SHARING. bri :)

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