Released Poem by Leah Ayliffe

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Rating: 5.0


Still saying everything is alright
No mask can hide the reality
His eyes will reveal the light
the truth hangs for me to see

No energy left to run
Made my bed in a dark hole
Not letting myself see the sun
Searching for my lost soul

I'm cursed with loneliness
No excuse for the way I live
Can I blame him for this mess?
I still have so much to give

Time is my secret affair
Deaf by a ticking clock's hand
Days go on with endless care
I go on drowning in summer's sand

To give up would be to let go
It'd be too hard for me to handle
It's everything that my heart knows
Memories burn out like a candle

He holds on tight in our last dance
It will take a while for this to mend
We think back to our days of romance
It's time our story came to an end.

Sunday, February 7, 2016
Topic(s) of this poem: break up,love
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
Was digging through my high school files and found this I wrote all those years ago.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Mike Smith 05 June 2016

One of the first rhyming pieces out of you that I've seen. And a good one at that especially considering that it was written some time ago. Finding old poems is a great thing. Each one is a miniature time capsule which communicates something that we were feeling or we observed years ago. It puts you back into the moment of its conception and cements the memories that inspired the poem in the mind.

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Paul Davies 07 February 2016

The cool tenor of this poem captures the moment for me very well; the situation evenly assessed - a moment that can recur largely unchanged at different times in life. One hopes it will not occur again, but if it does the song will be the same again. I have dug through the drawer to find the poem too many times, although others hardly at all.

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Daniel Brick 07 February 2016

At first I was happy to see today's poem: Reading a poem the very day it was written is something I enjoy. But then I finished reading it and felt really down. It's not possible to read a lyric poem and not feel its feelings seep into your feelings, it's a human as well as poetic reaction. I noticed this poem lacked your consistent energy of language, which made me think a bad experience had truly swamped you. B-U-T T-H-E-N I read your notes that this was an adolescent poem. WHEW! All's Well that Ends Well. Next day - Next poem.

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Souren Mondal 07 February 2016

'To give up would be to let go It'd be too hard for me to handle It's everything that my heart knows Memories burn out like a candle' Sometimes we become so accustomed to live with these memories, pain, and misery that even the very thought of trying to let them go - to dare to take a leap of faith into untested waters - seem to be a far worse idea than to hold on to the usual business of pain and misery.. A beautifully crafted poem Leah. Thanks for sharing.

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