Bri Edwards

Gold Star - 17,036 Points (some time ago / Earth, i believe)

Salamander...... [nature; A Salamander (Of Course!) : Confronting Nature; Almost Short] - Poem by Bri Edwards

Among damp leaves, in our front yard,
a spotted salamander lies.
A nest of eggs it does guard....
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Topic(s) of this poem: motherhood

Poet's Notes about The Poem

not to brag, but this may be one of my favorite creations (this poem) . i love the rhyming. we did have salamanders around the house we
just moved from and i think i did find a nest a few years ago. that
is where i lived when i wrote this.

john westlake thinks 'prying eyes' would be better than 'other eyes' and i'm inclined to agree with him, but 'other' is staying. :)
though i can never look at nature and assume it was created by a god, it is easy to see why many people cite 'nature's wonders' as evidence of God. AND to think that i can come up with this poem is also amazing but i still don't believe in God or Heaven, but DON'T tell God that!
i wrote this in Feb. but just revised it in May; it is even better now! bri edwards



Comments about Salamander...... [nature; A Salamander (Of Course!) : Confronting Nature; Almost Short] by Bri Edwards

  • Gold Star - 16,624 Points John Westlake (11/8/2014 4:43:00 PM)

    Ah salamanders. Unusual little creatures to be sure. Personally I would use prying eyes instead other eyes, but that's just me. Rhyming works here though, so it's all me (Report) Reply

    Gold Star - 17,036 Points Bri Edwards (11/13/2014 11:26:00 PM)

    yes, prying eyes is very good, perhaps better. i like it, but the other eyes will stay. thanks. :)

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  • Gold Star - 20,255 Points Daniel Brick (7/26/2014 9:00:00 PM)

    I like this poem very much. You establish an immediate rapport with the creature with your gentle stroking of its skin.
    And then leaving it and its young in the peace of nature is wonderful. Your poem reminds me of the tone and content of D H.Lawrence's poems about animals and higher praise cannot be given than that association. I agree with you about that cant regarding nature proves god's existence. Nature is a hodge-podge, not an orderly thoughtout pattern. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 45,404 Points Valsa George (5/30/2013 11:51:00 AM)

    Yes, by lifting the lid of Nature, you can see many more wonders! I have heard that in Pensylvania, there are many salamanders though we were taught earlier that they are extinct creatures! I enjoyed your poem, but more the poet's note! I will definitely tell God that there lives a man who denies the entity of God and breaks his commands very often! ! Ha! Ha! (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,483 Points Shahzia Batool (5/30/2013 6:27:00 AM)

    It's new and different! (new for me at least) , here rhyme-scheme is not a bondage as many advocates of free-verse think, but allowing the poet to speak of his heart about the salamander as an object of his keen observation, that's why the poem is a focused one. a good read! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 4,770 Points Paul Brookes (5/27/2013 1:39:00 AM)

    I hope the salamander lives a long and happy life as happy as this poem. Loved it. BB : O) (Report) Reply

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