Dear, I had a strange dream last night,
Adam and eve were in bliss in Eden,
Innocence all around was scattered,
In Nature shelter and trees fruit laden.
In perfect innocence they bathed,
Faith and trust its soothing shade;
Between them there was no secret,
Here love and joy could never fade.
Mutually nothing would they hide,
In all bareness they would confide.
Personal egos could never collide,
They plumed each other with pride.
From UFO, Satan alighted,
Out of fear he felt slighted.
He had a mischievous mind,
He had his own axe to grind.
From God a little wisdom snatched,
A little more he himself stretched.
His scientific temper machines made,
Textile & cosmetic mills he had laid.
He had set up his mills in Hell,
Eden he came his goods to sell.
He knew of Adam’s firm will,
He knew how Eve could thrill.
He approached Eve in Adam’s absence,
Saw Tree of Knowledge to her suspense.
Thus, in her he sowed seeds of distrust,
Deep rooted greed, lust and disgust.
Eve hided in ever new clothes,
Satan was happy in his loathe.
Everyday Eve made up new face,
On Satan’s face grin I could trace.
everything has a silver lining...even satan's wile...tell me if i'm wrong!
great story in a poetry..with a touch of slight fantasy... a nicely chosen words..convincing... the temptation of Eve....Satan tempted Eve because only a woman can tame a man...and Satan knows it...If He tempted Adam first, definitely Adam would decline...so it must be Eve first, so that Adam can't say no... all that is happening is according to God's Plan....for in Adam and Eve will start the generation of people... if not for them who commit original sin, then, we won't be here today... only Adam and Eve in the garden of Eden.....until now.. .and what is left for us to think is the tree of knowledge.. God have given us the intellect and our will.. .but not a will to do what we want but the will to do what we should ought to do... .(just my own opinion) ...10+++++
Adam and Eve story we all know, but this seems to be a modern version of their story, well written in poetry.
I enjoyed reading this modern day version of Adam and Eve, thank you 10 Lynda xx
A great write. Very well penned a somewhat difficult subject A wonderful read.
Inventive write, C.P...I like the subliminal parallel you draw...one that that unfortunately is in keeping with the world of today....Innocence is bliss, they say(whoever THEY are) , but bliss, can also be the serpent in his masque of mortal macabre....feasting on us as for fodder for his perditious dominion....Very Nice Work, indeed! F j R 2009
Innocence got covered, innocence is lost. I loved the way you created this story of the tempting and downfall of many of us. It happens all the time.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Paradise revisited. Truly Eve as the bane of Adam's existence. Satan was the consummate marketing man who knew the vanity of his consumers. Women is frailty personified but, my god, they are so loveable.