Lora Colon

Veteran Poet - 2,729 Points (26 September 1944 / Missouri - United States)

Say When


If you want me with you constantly,
All my hours are yours to own;
I'll stay with you, every day, every night,
Until you say 'Leave me alone'

If you want me to kiss you all night,
We'll hide where no one can see;
My lips will be yours 'til dawn appears,
Or until you say 'Stop kissing me'

If you want to share your cares with me,
I'll listen....... and comfort you;
I'll be here for you through all your pain....
Until you say 'Enough, that will do'

If you would like to live in my arms,
You know it's alright with me;
I'll hold you close to me, day and night,
Until you say 'Set me free'

If you want me to keep loving you,
Take my hand, and make your plea;
You know I won't leave the path I'm on
Until you say 'Stop loving me'!

Submitted: Monday, February 03, 2014
Edited: Tuesday, February 04, 2014

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  • Veteran Poet - 3,467 Points Brian Johnston (2/7/2014 11:52:00 AM)

    Well a definite 10 for me! You must be a very old soul Lora, with many lifetimes under your belt to be so wise!

    You've hit upon a fundamental truth for me Lora, unlike what is offered in your poem, love that insists on giving to another without end is not really love, it's like a used car salesman insisting we buy the car he wants to sell us. And how we all live in fear of hearing our loved one say the dreaded words of your last lines to each stanza when the truth is that we must be willing to give all these things to our loved one if we expect our love to be taken seriously. So to my ears your poem is a lovely restatement of an ancient truth that no one likes to hear, 'If you love someone, set them free. If the love between you is real, they will always return to you.' To this I would add, 'And if your love is real, you will always be willing to accept their gift, even if the gift is not quite what you were hoping for.'

    In my mind 'love' that only knows how to give is 'immature', unless you take the point of view that to not give (or to stop giving) to another can also be a gift. That is closer to what I would consider a definition of both 'mature' giving and 'real' love.

    In any case you are definitely the kind of woman I want to be loved by! (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 3,239 Points Pradip Chattopadhyay (2/5/2014 12:55:00 AM)

    true love is like that, only knows to give. (Report) Reply

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