Secret Song Poem by Leah Ayliffe

Secret Song

Rating: 4.8


my biggest secret,

and saddest song,

I want to know what in love is,

before I’m gone.

Monday, March 16, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: love
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Khairul Ahsan 16 March 2015

This short poem is beautiful! But I wonder why at this young age you should think of 'before I’m gone'? What you want to know may be a kept secret, but why should that be 'the saddest song'?

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Daniel Brick 20 March 2015

Poemhunter cut short my comment by inserting a SIGN IN request. Go figure. My comment should end: It will take the course of a whole life implied in that phrase BEFORE I'M GONE to fully comprehend LOVE, and until you are gone, you are still engaged in searching for whatever understanding is granted us.

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Sally Plumb Plumb 15 June 2015

Simply... lovely.

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Rishi Thakkar 24 October 2015

Simply putting d irresistible desire to be irresistibly desired..is what love is..People live an entire life trying to find the love which they found in the eyes of a mother..They crave for a man who cuddled tyr forehead like there father..yet we forget such influences are more beautiful in writings fairy tales and life is but a box of chocolates some dark and bitter the others milk and sweet..

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Daniel Brick 20 March 2015

This is a very short poem - only 17 words - but the very fact there are so few of them makes their multiple meanings multiply. I like the way this happens with the two words of the title - SECRET and SONG are expanded to two noun phrases, namely, BIGGEST SECRET and SADDEST SONG. Now it's not just a secret song we're dealing with but also with a secret within the song, secrecy characterizing both the container and the contained. And the new word which has appeared is SADDEST. Did one of the other words invite it, or did it come on its own? Either way that emotion is now part of the experience. My take on BEFORE I'M GONE is different from Khairul's. I don't see it in relation to your age, but rather in relation your (our) quest to comprehend LOVE. We can experience loves, add or subtract them from our lives, withdraw and return again and again, but that doesn't mean we comprehend LOVE. It will the whole course of a life on earth implied in the phrase

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Dev Anand 19 August 2017

what in love is, we all want to know that secret what is love what is in love.......your quest is a perennial quest. till death we go on experiencing it and waiting for this experience.. lovely lines dear poetess. dev

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Bill Cantrell 27 June 2016

Love indeed is a song and every once in a while a song comes along that we can't get out of our mind....and heart. A lovely poem!

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James Mclain 20 May 2016

It is an endless rollercoaster up and down it makes you do things you wouldn't normally do it's taking that chance on him and never looking back on what you chose.. iip

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Ernest Makuakua 27 January 2016

beautiful beautiful and short yet to the point keep writing sister

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Edward Kofi Louis 31 December 2015

The secret of love is always with the works of the truth. Nice work.

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