Marcus McKinley

Rookie - 175 Points (EARTH)

Seventh Heaven - Poem by Marcus McKinley

I like, your taste...
I like, your style...
I like the thoughts
behind your smile.

I like the cognition,
beyond your eyes.
Beyond your looks
I like your reprise.

You know me to well,
I need not say a word.
With one fleeting glance
my intentions are heard.

With one gentle caress
my passions unfold.
Transfixed in your kiss,
your love spell, takes hold.

Elation, mind racing...
Penetrating, breath taking
needing more... and more... of you.

Slipping deeper...
into your love.
Slipping deeper...
the surface above.

Succumbing, yielding,
giving in.
I am drowning, in you,
in sin...

Comments about Seventh Heaven by Marcus McKinley

  • Rookie - 397 Points Poetheart Morgan (11/23/2012 6:41:00 PM)

    Oh! Sounds like music! ! ! So sensual and smooth! ! ! ! What a physical love you describe here! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 424 Points Dr. Ramesh Mukhopadhyaya (10/5/2012 1:25:00 AM)

    It is wonderful in its simplicity. Reads like a ditty.But is getting plunged in love identical with getting sunk in sin? That shows that the throatful ease with which the poem took off got choked in the last line.Poor poet. He could not get rid of the mundane values even at empyrean heights.The poet is not capable of ecstasy.Call this poem a satire? The legitimation of the last line is that one must not be enamoured of the other. Call this poem didactic? Quite a good poem because of its opaqueness (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 5,245 Points Ken E Hall (9/23/2012 2:26:00 AM)

    Seventh heaven of love well said loved it but no sin indeed...regards (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 755 Points Almedia Knight-Oliver (9/8/2012 3:42:00 PM)

    Marcus, I like your style and your rhymes...I like your poem! (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,281 Points P Gleeson (8/26/2012 6:27:00 PM)

    I like your thoughts behind your smile Lovely piece ~ (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,669 Points Elena Sandu (8/24/2012 1:15:00 AM)

    Is there a big difference between possessing a woman's body or a woman's soul? … Or maybe both? …
    Is there more or less to a Seventh Heaven if there is one such? Your poem to me raised intriguing questions, thank you for share. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 4,012 Points Godfrey Morris (8/23/2012 6:28:00 PM)

    Great expressions, nice flow to this piece (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 184 Points Karen Sinclair (8/23/2012 4:46:00 PM)

    sensual composure....this is just so hummanah i love it all but i do not understand the tie up line, it makes it slightly sad after so much fresh air..... (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 4,679 Points Valerie Dohren (8/23/2012 4:40:00 PM)

    Very passionate write - some great lines. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Bella Hernandez (8/18/2012 5:42:00 PM)

    WOW! ! ! another breathless n speachless i have become! ! your poetry so much passion n zeal! i love them! ! ! great job! ! !
    ~Bella (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Kelly Seale (8/17/2012 11:16:00 PM)

    Ah, this is passion unfolding before mine eyes! Outstanding Write! The combination of your words describe such passion, love, lust, and ecstasy. I absolutely Love the last stanza! ! !
    ...Succumbing, yielding,
    giving in.
    I am drowning, in you,
    in sin...

    -Great Ink Marcus! ! !
    -kelly. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,519 Points Marieta Maglas (8/17/2012 7:47:00 AM)

    ''I am drowning, in you, ''-this is the key-line of this beautiful deserve another 10. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 46 Points Dickson Mseti (8/15/2012 11:29:00 AM)

    Sensetional and clasic poem (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,116 Points Pranab K Chakraborty (8/14/2012 12:36:00 AM)

    Fantastic aroma of surrendering soul. Nice love poem. Chased by passion and offering by soul. Thank you......Pranab k c 10 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Kasia Fedyk (8/13/2012 2:29:00 PM)

    Very beautiful and sensual, knowing another soul like never before. Beautiful write Marcus! very beautiful. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 67 Points Urshula Davis (8/12/2012 9:20:00 PM)

    I liked this! ! ! Very bold and a lot of details! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 885 Points Kaila George (8/12/2012 9:20:00 PM)

    That is a most provocative and sensual write....its brilliant in its flow of how much he wants and needs her such a beautiful write....very nice Marcus....will give you 10 on this one. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 222 Points Adam Mckim (8/12/2012 9:06:00 PM)

    I like this one. Very romantic and I like your choice of words. Good job. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, August 8, 2012

Poem Edited: Thursday, August 9, 2012

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