Bri Edwards

Gold Star - 9,642 Points (some time ago / Earth, i believe)

Shampoo In My Eyes...... [cleanliness; Who's At The Door? ; Humor; Short] - Poem by Bri Edwards

I was expecting an important package,
to be delivered by messenger to my home.
In order for me to check it for damage...
I wanted to take it at the door, ……so I dared not roam.

But the messenger was not due to arrive....
for another hour; it was not quite then five.
I'd been sweating, and smelled not like a flower,
so I decided to take the time it'd take to shower.

The water flowed warmly o'er my mighty frame.
My bodybuilding efforts had brought to me some fame.
I was NOT done before the doorbell rang, .....to my surprise.
So I opened up the door stark-naked, with ….shampoo in my eyes.

It would not have been so bad if she'd been old and gray,
if she had been a HE, or if I'd remembered my towel. Hey!
But she was a SHE, and one of the cutest I'd seen in my life.
Unfortunately, I guess, for me, the 'messenger' was my neighbor's wife.

(July 1,2014)


Poet's Notes about The Poem

so, i was thinking about the woman next door. nah! it wasn't like that. maybe you can guess the story behind this. :) bri

Comments about Shampoo In My Eyes...... [cleanliness; Who's At The Door? ; Humor; Short] by Bri Edwards

  • Rookie - 274 Points Words' Knight (7/22/2014 12:09:00 PM)

    this poem is beautiful and interesting; I enjoyed reading it; it is like a short story. (Report) Reply

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  • Gold Star - 16,088 Points Mandolyn ... (7/21/2014 9:10:00 PM)

    Ha! I love the - hey!
    I love segues! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 15,578 Points John Westlake (7/13/2014 8:48:00 AM)

    Oh dear. Ha ha ha. I have seen this sort of scene in films and I must say it is rather amusing. Sounds like had fun writing it. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 45 Points Colleen Courtney (7/12/2014 2:57:00 PM)

    Haha! Oh jeez......I think I'm actually speechless.... (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 14,840 Points * Sunprincess * (7/10/2014 9:29:00 PM)

    .........if this poem was a movie....it would be a blockbuster....and truly, worthy of an Oscar....loved reading every line in this entertaining piece.... (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 25,038 Points Valsa George (7/5/2014 7:54:00 AM)

    In her embarrassment, did she take to heels forgetting to hand over the parcel? ? Imagine the fun of you then chasing her! ! (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 4,472 Points Brian Johnston (7/5/2014 1:52:00 AM)

    I personally think you were a postman for too long my friend! Ha! Your version is cute but my version is definitely sexier. Maybe that is because I lift weights? : -) (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 9,642 Points Bri Edwards (7/2/2014 12:55:00 AM)

    there was a serious typo in the last stanza when first submitted; hopefully that is ok by the time you read this. :) (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, July 2, 2014

Poem Edited: Wednesday, July 2, 2014


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