Scotty Dogg

Rookie - 147 Points (Don't rightly remember. They always called me Dogg / The Potato Fields, Indiana)

The Bad Poem - Poem by Scotty Dogg

We'll lash you up foul poem,
And bind you in three knots.
We'll twist you till your stars
Won't shine, and
Your roses start to rot.

We'll burrow out a tiny hole
And plant you in the clay.
We'll put a muzzle on
Your moans so
Your whimpers fade away.

Topic(s) of this poem: fashion

Comments about The Bad Poem by Scotty Dogg

  • Rookie - 118 Points William F. Dougherty (10/17/2015 11:36:00 AM)

    Think about making I'll and we'll and pronoun agreement.
    Does muzzling moans produce whispers, or would whimpers
    be a better fit.

    Doc (Report) Reply

    Rookie - 147 Points Scotty Dogg (10/17/2015 1:14:00 PM)

    I like the suggestions. Will change. Thanks for reading!

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  • Gold Star - 45,462 Points Valsa George (12/15/2013 2:29:00 AM)

    Don't strangle and stifle it to death! Let it breathe, so that it might please someone! Very interesting!

    I have never sung the dirge of any poem! However bad it is, I see that it survives! ! (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,092 Points Kanav Justa (10/29/2013 2:14:00 PM)

    haha, , , , i have got so many of them, , , would need your help... to burry them, , , (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 265 Points Laughing@ You (10/25/2013 12:50:00 PM)

    SD, this is very funny and light. Reminds of the late, great Herbert Nehrlich's work (and trust me, that is a compliment; he was a master rhymer!) . (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 17,290 Points Bri Edwards (10/12/2013 3:13:00 PM)

    i KNEW this sounded familiar! who can remember all that has happened in the last three months? and i still like this....a lot. ya know, i used to write 'til for until, until i found that till is proper. your poem has 'till. i think that is a hybrid. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 17,290 Points Bri Edwards (7/31/2013 4:24:00 PM)

    which one of mine WAS it? now that i have read it again, i notice you haven't done all that YET. or have you by now? or are you just a lot of hot air? you are really a pussy cat, not a dogg, right? and you wouldn't REALLY harm a poor little poem. to quote Sandy Player, below, Poor thing; it ain't it's fault. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Aria Siren (5/28/2013 10:44:00 AM)

    All of the sudden the poems in my graveyard started screaming at me. I better add another thick layer of cement over their gaping mouths. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 36 Points Sandy Player (12/31/2012 5:33:00 PM)

    We can feel your abuse of the bad poem as we read. Poor thing; it ain't it's fault. Ahhhhhh! I admit! The blame goes to me! ! ! Woe and more woe... (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 4,731 Points Valerie Dohren (12/27/2012 2:28:00 PM)

    Oh dear, poor poem - hope none of mine are that bad, but who knows....... Good one Scotty. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,512 Points Unwritten Soul (12/26/2012 1:14:00 PM)

    The rhythm really fun to come out from mouth after reading this, what i know this is not the bad poem...not bad poem_Soul (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 36,928 Points * Sunprincess * (12/24/2012 8:24:00 PM)

    love this one dear..sure you know how to tame
    those bad poems..hahaha..sending you and
    your family wishes for a merry christmas and
    a happy new year with lots of love! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 7,730 Points Veeraiyah Subbulakshmi (12/20/2012 9:38:00 AM)

    Two different notes! the first stanza is better and the second speaks about the universal drama! what a 'bad' poem! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, December 20, 2012

Poem Edited: Saturday, October 17, 2015

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