Vijay Sai

Rookie - 356 Points (30 12 1975 / Trichy, South India)

The Dawn - Poem by Vijay Sai

As the wide cover of unevaluating darkness
studded with sparkling spots
which glitter and glimmer in unproportionate delays
begin to fold itself in gentle pace
the sweetly singing chirping birds
with brisk clapping feathers
wander and ponder to all parts in search of survival
to last another gruelling day of tedious struggles
the grimly faced white shadowy angel
shies herself away from the
bright, shiny, sunny appearance
of her much powerful spouse
reminding us to peel off the perils of the past
and face the fragrant fantasies of future

Comments about The Dawn by Vijay Sai

  • Scotty Dogg Scotty Dogg (12/26/2012 11:52:00 AM)

    Terrific! Again, you paint the pictures, and we follow. Good work here. (Report) Reply

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  • Tony Karas (12/12/2012 9:48:00 AM)

    Extremely visionary... provoked hope and promise. Fine effort. (Report) Reply

  • Jahan Zeb Jahan Zeb (11/9/2012 3:43:00 AM)

    reminding us to peel off the perils of the past
    and face the fragrant fantasies of future

    This is fantastic. The dawn is not just the end of a night it is the start of of a new day and that should be the attitude and spirit. You do well in your poems.
    Wonderful Write.
    Jahan (Report) Reply

  • Ancita Michael Ancita Michael (11/9/2012 3:32:00 AM)

    i love the way you have described the birds.. very good flow of thoughts. nice work. (Report) Reply

  • Zahra Shariat Zahra Shariat (11/9/2012 3:12:00 AM)

    it's beautiful. specially the ending part (Report) Reply

  • Kevin Maroney (6/5/2012 5:08:00 PM)

    This poem has much meaning beyond its simple title. It bring elements of darker things and other connections to our world and holds many metaphors. I much prefer this type of poem - thank you for the wonderful journey you've presented to me, your reader. Please read some of mine too. (People seem to especially like my Cloud poem, though it is one of my first and simplest. Please feel free to peruse my other works as well.) (Report) Reply

  • Vincent Kuo Vincent Kuo (6/1/2012 5:25:00 PM)

    Wow, beautiful poem! It's astounding because I also just recently completed a poem with the same principles, it's called Break of Dawn. May I be honoured to invite you to read it, I'm sure you'll find it exceptionally interesting! (Report) Reply

  • Denise Bekker ~* The Sound *~ (6/16/2010 11:45:00 AM)

    Beautiful, inspiring poem. Poetic language, wonderfully interwoven write. Well done! ; D (Report) Reply

  • Da Pwetti Metardal (6/13/2010 5:21:00 PM)

    i really like this poem it really inspired me
    i also skimmed through some of your other poems and found that they were
    fantastic and i dont know what you do but it makes you think your exactly in the pom and have been through everything.
    Although i thought these were amazzing their not my everyday poems that i like to read.....And also i couldnt find your ART OF LIFE poem you told me to visit: (but i love your poetry keep it up (Report) Reply

  • Jeswin V (6/10/2010 2:19:00 PM)

    Sir, u write a different genre of poetry...........words used are beautifully beaded together..........brilliant flow of thoughts...........

    though..........u can take ur writing to a new level..........
    just need to keep a few things in focus while presenting it for reading purposes.....

    But then again..........brilliant writing :) (Report) Reply

  • Hans Vr Hans Vr (6/9/2010 8:19:00 AM)

    Dawn, perhaps the most magical moment of the day
    very nice poetical description, very human, a lot of feeling.
    and in the end postive expectations dominate with fragrant fantasies, a fantastic choice of words.
    Thanks for sharing, Tomorrow morning I will think about the fragrant fantasies and perhaps it will make may day a bit more fragrant. (Report) Reply

  • Donette May (6/9/2010 7:15:00 AM)

    nicely written...i like this poem - sweet and expressive (Report) Reply

  • Ronia Murray (6/9/2010 7:00:00 AM)

    Beautiful Piece
    wonderfully described (Report) Reply

  • Gan Chennai (5/24/2010 12:33:00 AM)

    Nice. A very fine piece about the exquisiteness of Dawn. (Report) Reply

  • Sally Plumb Plumb (12/25/2009 12:36:00 PM)

    I look forward to fragrant fantasies. (Report) Reply

  • warner treuter (11/20/2009 9:25:00 PM)

    Can't say i exactly understand the content of this poem but I can certainly recognise the last two
    lines as being a high grade of poetry. (Report) Reply

  • Vanita Thakkar (6/20/2009 6:12:00 AM)

    Nice poem. Good imagination. (Report) Reply

  • Yoonoos Peerbocus (6/17/2009 5:21:00 AM)

    creative and meaningful all through (Report) Reply

  • Marieta Maglas (6/9/2009 11:57:00 AM)

    nice topic nicely penned (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, June 9, 2009

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