The Dungeon And Demons Poem by Joaquin Santana

The Dungeon And Demons

Rating: 5.0


Awakening…….in a state of confusion, not knowing where I am, or how I got here.
I try to focus my eyes using what little light that seems to appear.
Alas, I cannot see anything around me.
Fear of what lurks in the dark consumes me.
My other senses begin to take over in order to compensate for my uncertainty of the unknown.
In the air is the stench of mildew and funk as my sense of smell begins to hone.
As I listen, I can hear the sound of water dripping.
I feel around and notice giant cinder blocks to my left crumbling and splitting.
As I turn to my right I fell abruptly.
I sit still listening, and now feel something touching me corruptly.
Afraid of what it could be,
My reflexes take control forcing me to kick violently.
Hearing a loud squeak and sounds of scampering, I realize it was a rodent.
All the while the stench of corrosion and mildew becomes more potent.
As I continue feeling around I realize I fell off a bench connected to the wall.
I wonder, "How did I get here? Could I have possibly been drugged at all? "
I investigate my surroundings further, and notice bars running vertically.
As I grasp the bars little critters scamper over my fingers erratically.
I pull away quickly with sheer disgust.
It seems I am in a dungeon of some sort, with the telltale sign of must.
Suddenly I see light that I had not seen before.
There are rows of church pews, a podium, and these bars must be the door.
Somehow I manage to squeeze through the bars into peace and serenity.
Such a feeling of relief, I no longer feel the lowly sense of pity.
As I stand in the back of the church I notice a door to my left.
People began to walk in looking sullen and bereft.
Suddenly I notice my mother in front with her head down, sobbing.
I wonder what is wrong and thought, "My poor mother", with my heart throbbing.
I begin to walk along the right lane and squeeze through the row behind her.
When I asked what was wrong she looked at me with a sense of demure.
As she said nothing, one by one, everyone else began to stare at me as well.
I begin to quickly backtrack, sensing something was amiss that I could not quell.
As I reach the back of the church I notice something odd.
Looking at the door I notice everyone coming in had a twin, triplet, and even a quad.
As I look to the front again suddenly I seen everyone's true colors.
They all changed to demons; Vile and disgusting bloodsuckers.
Fearful for my life, I race back to the seclusion of my dungeon.
But to my horror they simply walk through the bars by the dozens!
Panicking with nowhere to go, I turn to stand on my bench made of wood.
To my surprise someone was laying there, an ally, which would be good.
As he slept with his back to me I realize it is my brother, even better!
When he turns I see he is one of them, simply acting as a fetter.
I'm now cornered and close my eyes to accept my fate of being devoured!
I think to myself, "If only I wasn't such a coward."
Suddenly I sit up in a cold wet sweat, with my heart pumping to the extreme!
To my relief it was all just a horrific dream!
I have another chance to grow courage, live life, and improve my self-esteem.

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
I was detained in the Cook County Jail when I was 19 years old. My family was distraught about my arrest. I was involved with the wrong crowd, and I was arrested for 2 attempted murders. I was facing a considerable amount of time. I did not have money for bail or for a good lawyer. I was young and afraid that I would spend a considerable amount of time in prison. When I first got to the county jail I was put in a newly built section that was known as the 'Super Max' (because of the guard towers, double fence wrapped in barbed wire, and yards that were mere basketball courts wrapped from top to bottom with bars. A bird couldn't even fly onto the yard, it was so secure.) , or 'The White House' because the entire building was white except for the tinted windows. Everyone there at that time had a class x felony. Everyone had anything from murder, attempted murder, car jacking, to home invasion. All violent offenders. I met a friend that I had not seen in such a long time. I was glad to see him because I was unfamiliar with this situation. He gave me a shank as a welcome present. I asked him what I was suppose to do with it. Was I suppose to hit someone or protect someone? He said, 'It's for you, keep it with you at all times. I'm giving it to you because I care about you. Everyone else has one so you need one too.' From that day on I was under an enormous amount of stress, and quit often severely depressed because I felt like my situation was hopeless. I had to be strong and not show that I was afraid because others would prey on me if they knew this. Couple this with the uncertainty of what would happen with my court case and you have nothing but stress. I began to have nightmares. They became so frequent that I would stay up as long as I could at night because I knew I would have a nightmare. The nightmares got so bad that I felt like I was being tortured every night. This poem is based on one of the more memorable nightmares that I had. Some people say that dreams have meanings. I remembered it because I couldn't figure what the meaning of it was. It was frightening for me to even imagine what it all meant.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Elysabeth Faslund 27 October 2013

Cut out a LOT of unnessary words and you got it!

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Sam Kim 27 October 2013

This sounds more like a story than a poem but still it was a very beautiful piece of writing. I enjoyed it thoroughly

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Diana Rosser 06 October 2013

In all honesty Joaquin, to me your poem reads more like prose rather than poetry. Nonetheless I think it very atmospheric and wondered have you considered writing a short story about your whole experience and entering it on storywrite. Just a thought. Diana

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Aditya Gupta 28 September 2013

u very articulately express your fear. one of the purpose of poetry is to be able to be understood, and i think your poem does that for you.

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Dipy Hermonite 27 September 2013

I read your poem Joaquin. I really feel its very good. And I went through each line. It deserves an 'excellent' and that's exactly what's being given by me. I also read your comment on the public bulletin. Just don't worry about any contest Joaquin. Winning these contests is not important. You have great talent. Just keep expressing yourself honestly and people who matter will automatically love your work. Keep Smiling and Keep Walking. Best Regards. Dipy

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Joaquin Santana

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Chicago, Illinois, U.S.A.
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