Vivek Tiwari

Rookie - 98 Points (23 July 1985 / Gaura (R.S.) Pratapgarh)

The Immortal Soul - Poem by Vivek Tiwari

Be this conch can be confined within great grotesque gate

But the soul that's free fresh fine and part divine

Can't be snared in a snarer's snares nor can burn in flaming shine

Nor can be weighted about by the affection's weight.

Its always a phonex rare winding in angelic state

Soothing and surging itself to its very fanny fins fine

Vitaling the very start of life festing the frame a living shrine

Pushes the pulses and forcing the feelings to rear or retreat.

Neither inevitable end nor ashes is ever designed its goal

Tis all liberty unrestrained freshness-filled a seenless sight

That fills this frame of flesh and bone with senses humble and meek

And proves the life neither beginning nor end nor any waste of toil

But to ever hail with all enthusiasm the gurdon bearing fight

Letting the fools to play in vain the game of hide and seek.


29-9/01-10-2007


Poet's Notes about The Poem

This is one of my best (self considered) poems that depicts the philosophy of soul's immortality.
The two special features of the poem which I have efforted much for are its genre and device- ie. Miltonic sonnet pattern and use of alliteration.
We should not be afraid of death but should be keep on carrying our duties whose carrying is the reward of life.

Comments about The Immortal Soul by Vivek Tiwari

  • Rookie Nidhi Vivek (8/10/2013 1:54:00 AM)

    got the salvation with thy motivation, hey! thee geared guy, wish to fly. (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie Www. Poemhunter.com/m-d-dinesh-nair-2 (1/9/2013 6:46:00 AM)

    Good effort indeed. Though the genre and the kind of device used the lines triumph. But with the Miltonic pattern the syntactical concerns surface often and grammatical flaws entwine the thread of lines..
    We should keep on carrying our duties....reward for life. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 120 Points Matt Mooney (1/5/2013 11:55:00 AM)

    The poem is very creative, both in the use of language and in the development of the theme.10. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 93 Points Payal Parande (1/4/2013 7:57:00 AM)

    very spontaneous yet gentle....beautiful jobs on the words sir fabulous (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,323 Points Xelam Kan™ (1/4/2013 5:40:00 AM)

    a good piece of artistic expression........
    alliteration is good but in sonnet we mainly focus on pattern and rhyming, must be carry the meaning with as structure progress.
    would be more better if these features were synced.......2ndly the topic is quite pregnant in nature, immortality of soul
    dare to be treated and you did........ good job (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, January 4, 2013

Poem Edited: Friday, January 4, 2013


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