The Life That We Are Part Of Poem by john tiong chunghoo

The Life That We Are Part Of



one life
one soul
shared by
entities

all added
up to one
larger life

the river
freezes
because it
it is telling
the sun
not to go
too far

the moon
hangs out
in the night
because
it wishes
to share
the secrets
of the sun

the cloud
comes down
as rain
because
it wishes to
share with
all the glory
of the sky

the trees
bear fruits
because
it wishes
to thank all
for giving air
as well as
hellp spread
their kinds

the sky is
thunder and
lightning
because
it wishes
to throw
a balance
between earth
and sky

the world is
getting hotter
because
it wishes
to tell us
we have gone
against its order

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Debora Short 29 December 2006

Incredible soul speak here, John! Wonderful capture! Debora

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Raynette Eitel 29 December 2006

I liked the beginning of this, John...mostly two-word lines. It was very effective, but then you got a little wordy, a little preachy. For me the poem ended with the stanza about the cloud. Just a thought. Raynette

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john tiong chunghoo

john tiong chunghoo

Sibu, Sarawak, Borneo East Malaysia
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