John Kim

Rookie (January 7 1967 / Jaengsun Kangwondo South Korea)

The Mistic Ocean - Poem by John Kim

It's a beautiful the mistic ocean.
I‘m intoxicating because a unknown mystery.
The Ocean feel as my inside world and
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Comments about The Mistic Ocean by John Kim

  • Rookie Chastity Pureheart (12/13/2013 11:19:00 PM)

    Pretty good other than the horrible grammar and spelling (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie Focus Literary.arts (11/12/2013 1:02:00 PM)

    I'd like to publish an edited version of your poem. Something like this:


    The Mystic Ocean


    Beautiful, the mystic ocean.

    And I'm drunk again,
    unknown.

    A mystery.

    The Ocean,
    my inside world.

    And the surf breaks
    as drops of water.

    The Soul,
    lonely and came to see
    the Ocean's kept dream,
    so similar.

    As wide and as deep,
    of a place of everything.

    Life.

    Sometimes,
    the Ocean,
    so melancholy and furious.

    Was a very long time ago.

    The Ocean,
    my mind.

    Falling.

    And I felt the coldness of life,
    so I came to the Ocean.

    Searching for the dream of my Soul.


    by John Kim (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Dick Muncher (4/7/2013 7:20:00 PM)

    Your spelling and grammar are both on a kindergarten level. Please consider revising both of these feilds before posting on this or any other website. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie C A (3/15/2011 10:09:00 PM)

    ...It's spelled 'mystic'. There are quite a few grammatical mistakes here: |
    And spelling mistakes. I can edit it for you if you want. But if you're going to write poetry in the English language, please use spell check and double check your grammar.
    Cheers. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Diana Ferrer (1/15/2010 7:43:00 PM)

    very very beautiful indeed... the ocean is so inspiring isnt it. I have a poem about the ocean as well, please read it and comment? (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Rayanda Arts (10/15/2009 12:21:00 AM)

    I too love the line 'I felt the cold weather of life so I came to the Ocean.' Beautiful. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 301 Points Chris G. Vaillancourt (10/14/2009 11:14:00 PM)

    It is spelled 'mystic' (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Yoonoos Peerbocus (10/12/2009 10:18:00 PM)

    this piece is as deep if not deeper than the ocean/ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Nalathai Vongjalorn (10/12/2009 5:35:00 AM)

    Love the part where you said I felt the cold weather of life so I came to the Ocean.
    very nice 10 (Report) Reply








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