Antoinette Kopperfield

I think the man you speak of had more compassion in his eyes than you or the driver. You could go a lot further with your thinking before you start writing but dont give up on the whole quite a good poem with imagination and depth. Please get better. Youre good!

There is a danger here of 'knowing' what everyone is thinking. It would be better to show what each person did to make you think that. There must be a word missing in the third line of the second stanza. When you say 'he asks again' I looked back to see where he asked the first time. Again, this poem needs to be reworked. You have some good images and I love your subject matter. Haven't we all seen these guys on street corners? Oh, another thing...a thought crossed my mind when I read the second line...'Is the cup half full or half empty? ' Perhaps you could think of a way to describe his cup without the overused phrase.