The Trickle Poem by Anita Atina

The Trickle

Rating: 5.0


I could feel the moist gathering
Yielding into the uneven folds and valleys

Micro rivulets, merging to flow
Into a single large dropp of sweat

That trickled from my brow
Teetering precariously

At the tip of my nose
Before yielding to the inevitable force

Of gravity that sucked into
Hot dust, the salt and water of my being.

Evaporating in the blink of an eye,
Licked by the merciless heat.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Al Ramos 10 May 2009

Knowing that there is more sweat and tears to come, great job.

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Fiona Davidson 09 May 2009

image rich write...enjoyable read....10++++

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LOVEFOOL Aka 04 May 2009

Such clarity giving beautiful significance to something so small 10++

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Alison Cassidy 02 May 2009

You have taken a tiny detail of life and enlarged it with your attentiveness to detail and your poetic awareness. The result is quite magnificent - personal and universal. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

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