The Way To Eden Poem by Tareq Jalabi

The Way To Eden

Rating: 4.3


under these fancy clothes
there was a tired body
and a mind with no goals
plus a soul that was bloody
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my troubled mind
went from bad to worse a fall
and had none to guide
but my dying soul
.......
live your life like
there is no tomorrow
just do what you like
and you'll never feel sorrow
.......
this advice I've taken
and haven't worked for me
the adviser was mistaken
'am worse than i used to be
........
if you want you to mean something,
and not to be forgotten
think always of helping
not of what you've gotten
........
consider life after death
then to heaven may pass
before He takes your breath
think of Hell and Eden's grass

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Soumia Benmechiche 18 March 2009

I liked it so much., very nice poem.keep writting dear friend poet. Best wishes

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Pablo Cruise 24 March 2009

I agree. The last stanza sells it. Nice, Blue Eyes

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Britney Hogue 24 March 2009

very good poem i like the way it flowes and the msg that is given

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Lily Law 27 March 2009

Yep.. Totally agree with you.. Life is great but death is also another great adventure... ^-^

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Saadat Tahir 26 May 2009

nice write and message bundeled together cheers

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Prof. Dr. Sakti Chakravorty 08 November 2009

‘…and had none to guide // but my dying soul…’ NICE LINES Ten++ dr.sakti

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Sally Plumb Plumb 07 November 2009

The Way To Eden is my preference.

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Emu Getachew 06 November 2009

it's a philosophical piece with great twist actually comforting to see young poets such as yourself addressing the much needed theme of our time-service to others! Good write

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Ronell Warren Alman 05 November 2009

Great poem! I would definitely use this poem! Keep up the good work!

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Joseph Poewhit 05 November 2009

Has something to think about

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