The Window To The Soul Poem by Gracie lou
The Window To The Soul
Your eyes were once the window
The window to my happiness
They were once my salvation
The window to what once was
They were something real
The window to what I believed in
They were once the truth
The window to every tomorrow
They were once my inner feelings
The window to what I truly felt
They were once,
They were once beautiful
But they were once
And now they arent
They are the window that has been closed
The window to which the key has been thrown
They are the window to which I never wish to see
The window to which I saw evil
Your eyes were once your soul
They are now glazed with bitterness
I want to look into something different
something new, something clear
But something that was. Forever
The eyes are the window to the soul
So look deep into that window
Just thought, Gracie Lou but we know the 'eyes are the window to the soul' saying so well, and you 'play' the picture so effectively throughout the poem, do you really need to re-state it at the end - it makes it a bit too obvious? For what it is worth, I thought the punctuation in the last line of the previous stanza and leaving it hanging on a one-word sentence: 'Forever' (and without a full stop at the end so the reader can see it stretching on) , might be an interesting alternative ending? We also sometimes use 'Forever' as the ending salutation in a letter, which could make it doubly poignant. Anyway, that's what I thought when I read it....; forever, TJ
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I can see where your point of view is coming from Tony, as I did have the same feeling when writing it, but at the same time, the person it is meant to be focused on, needs the point to be obvious in order for them to understand... so the last line is obvious for the purpose of its subject, if you can see where I am coming from. In ending it with the message at the beginning it brings it to a full circle. There is method to my madness. Thankyou for you comments.