This is of poor technical quality. No evidence of structure, and poor punctuation. Disappointingly arrhythmic, there is little use of pentameter, and this further emphasises the lack of a rhyme scheme. Usually not such a crime in poetry, but under the exceptional circumstance of there being no other poetic device, you might'v expected Pastan to pay attention to something even the average nursery student can add into a poem! She hides behind walls of pathetic and pretentious philosophy and metaphors to cover up the fact that she cannot write a half-decent poem. Long-gone are the days of Tennyson, Keats, Owen, poets who payed attention to structure and technique!
Oh! Linda! Such a beautiful metaphor! I imagine most parents have had this experience and saw it just the way you have painted it here. So Lovely. It is one of my favorites since I have found your work. Keep writing and thinking the way you do. You give the finite circle of life such beauty with your words. Keep the work coming for the rest of us to enjoy. Delsie
This poem is really touching. Choosing of the metaphor bike riding is poignant. It touches the finer nuances of mother daughter relationship. i would like to ask the poet the insecurity or anxiety is reflection of poet's jewish background or one should see it more as a girl's sense of freedom in the context of womens's liberation.
its really lovely poem. my mother was very impressed with it. it reminds her of her childhood days. i too think its a fascinating poem describing the strong relationship between a mother and her child.
It's a lovely touching story, but I find it difficult to understand that this is 155 in the top 500 poems whilst Gray's Elegy languishes at no 457. I'm all for accentuating the positive - and I think I've done that in this case - but I can't get on this bus. Sorry.
Here's my take: this is chopped up prose and scarcely poetry at all. Its not even 'heightened prose'. Linda should write short stories and essays, which her talents are more suited for, and make some money. Prose is far more profitable. She's cheating herself commercially and cheating readers artistically. -LP
This is another wonderful work of art. What a marvelous picture you paint and so much feeling and depth. It is great the way you describe a simple bike riding lesson and make it reflect on your feelings of sepperation from our children. I particularly liked the last few lines: -
the hair flapping
behind you like a