Twilight Poem by Deep Mukherjee

Twilight

Rating: 4.3


T ruth
W ipes out
I nfertile
L and of fantasy
I n a far distant maze
G od is busy in painting
H er colours of tears and raptures
T hen twinge twists in pinch of reality

Truth wipes away the infertile land of fantasy!



TANKA


Twilight creeps in
Crimson dreams yearn in the sky
Blue-azure-cyan
One last quest of salvation
Like birds returning to nest!

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Leslie Philibert 19 August 2012

Hallo Deep, I enjoyed this, but I would post the two poems extra, I`m not too sure that the mix is a good idea, they deserve to be looked at apart. I`m not too sure if the Tanka keeps to the syllable count of a standard Tanka, but I am a pragmatist who says, if it works it`s fine, and I like both of these poems. You might be interested to look at my writing. Regards, Leslie

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Freddy Ibarra 18 August 2012

The structure is interesting. I love the imagery.

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Neela Nath Das 17 August 2012

The first verse is acrostics. Very nice.Impressive usage of nice imagery.

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Betty Bolden 17 August 2012

this is very nice. Good work.

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