Untrusted, Unveiled Poem by Nashy Lamen

Untrusted, Unveiled

Rating: 5.0


As I waver into the night sleep,
I can't help but think,
As I wander and blink,
As I wander so deep...

I thought of mistakes,
some I would regret,
And some that I did not
intentionally forget...

But this I thought of,
It was stumped in my head,
Was it all my fault?
All the pain he has shed? ..

Guilt trapped my mind,
As I choked out my pride,
With a sorry so soft,
I run back to hide...

Then silence broke,
And darkness prevailed,
Alone there I was,
Untrusted, unveiled...

I forged my own words,
so faux and so fake,
I tried to be careful,
with what drama I'd make..

I might make things worse,
if I blemish or slip,
With this burden I hold,
I blunder, I trip..

No options left here,
but to face it with fear,
Untrusted, Unveiled,
no statement was clear...

I tried to comprehend,
But it was no use,
Untrusted, unveiled,
No sense left to muse..

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Julia Pascual 20 August 2009

nice poem... greatly done.. strong dark emotions... but focus on positive things ok? ? =)

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Danzen D. 02 July 2009

If this were a dramatic monologue presented to a large audience, I believe you'd get a standing ovation. A great write..I think this one would become famous someday..thinking and dancing with the shadows, confusion and darkness..read the poem and you'll have nothing more to say. I look forward to more of your poems. -grins-

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Naseer Ahmed Nasir 11 June 2009

A true contemplation seems to have been disturbed by some distressing act that has covered the senses with pelts of fear...........

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Eyan Desir 11 June 2009

Nice flow well writen

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Lorena Cruz 11 June 2009

nicely done.. but please don't stress your self too much..

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