Valerie Dohren

Gold Star - 4,717 Points (13 January 1947 / Southport)

Upon A Winter's Day - Poem by Valerie Dohren

So cold upon a winter's day
In icy winds the trees did sway
And all around the snow there lay -
So cold upon a winter's day

I felt the chill upon my face
The mist did all the hills embrace
With frosted trees as fine-spun lace -
I felt the chill upon my face

And snowflakes melting on my hand
Beneath my feet the frozen land
White crystals speckling the sand -
Like snowflakes melting on my hand

With raindrops falling from the sky
The birds to warmer regions fly
You left me here, alone, to sigh -
‘Neath raindrops falling from the sky

O why then did you say goodbye …..

Comments about Upon A Winter's Day by Valerie Dohren

  • Gold Star - 36,621 Points * Sunprincess * (2/6/2013 8:31:00 AM)

    dear Valerie, this is absolutely beautiful and sad,
    also I did notice the wonderful rhyming scheme.
    which I will certainly make a mental note of. (Report) Reply

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  • Gold Star - 5,740 Points Patricia Grantham (1/25/2013 9:15:00 AM)

    Such a beautiful peace of work, I love the snow thanks (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 187 Points Owain Glyn (1/2/2013 6:32:00 AM)

    A very skilled piece, enjoy the brief time the season is with us. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 399 Points Terry O'leary (12/30/2012 3:55:00 AM)

    The winter can be beautiful... and cruel... so similar to love... very nice poem, , , Terry (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 5,215 Points Walterrean Salley (12/29/2012 9:40:00 PM)

    Perfect rhyme scheme. I feel the rhythm as I read. So lovely and pure, and yet so sad. I thoroughly enjoyed. Well done Val. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 148 Points Red O'mara (12/27/2012 9:53:00 PM)

    What a wonderfully tender and moving poem. Beautiful. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 45,456 Points Valsa George (12/25/2012 7:05:00 AM)

    A very beautiful poem with such ease and flow, rhythmic and musical! ! This deserves full 10

    Have a Merry Christmas and a wonderful New Year, Valerie! ! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 972 Points Chandra Thiagarajan (12/24/2012 11:34:00 PM)

    A magnificent write about the winter and the snow: ! Brings the very nature close to our heart. For one who has not experienced the snow the portrayal is very vivid. I loved it. The poem in itself sounds very musical.
    Merry Christmas and A Happy New Year.! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 6 Points Stevie Taite (12/24/2012 4:39:00 PM)

    Snow makes even the roughest landscape look flawless for a while, then it's just a load of dirty slush! Illusory layers to this poem! Love it! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 525 Points Vipins Puthooran (12/24/2012 2:51:00 PM)

    O why then did you say goodbye …..
    An amazin' poem! ! ! Top marksss
    Happy X mas! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Www. (12/24/2012 10:41:00 AM)

    A piece wherein lines of apt words are wedded to season and thoughts alike... (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 4,112 Points Diane Hine (12/24/2012 7:55:00 AM)

    A wistful poem with beautiful structure Val. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 126 Points Kelvin Owusu (12/24/2012 6:24:00 AM)

    O why, when did this love die. an enjoyable read and excellent write (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 93 Points Payal Parande (12/24/2012 5:18:00 AM)

    how beautiful description...each word tells a new story of a winter...bravo mam

    thank you for sharing
    payal (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 18,509 Points Lyn Paul (12/23/2012 10:28:00 PM)

    Very Beautiful Valerie, love the rhyming. I can only imagine as have not seen snow, so thank you for putting me in the picture. You make it so real. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Heather Wilson (12/23/2012 4:54:00 PM)

    May the rain soon vanish from your world Val, enchanting poem with such a heartfelt ending. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 4,127 Points Dave Walker (12/23/2012 1:12:00 PM)

    A beautiful poem, a fantastic write. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,298 Points Robinson (12/23/2012 9:04:00 AM)

    Snow then rain? Or snow here rain there? Either or neither nor
    does it matter, still a great poem of imagery with a slight dash of remorse and a puzzle
    the reader is teased to solved. (Report) Reply

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